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Blog: TWO WRITING TEACHERS (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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We can teach students about improving their writing process and to write with detail and voice by watching Guy Fieri on "Diners, Drive-Ins and Dives."
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Enter to winI just did a quick revision of a picture book that’s in progress.
Shorter. One goal was to shorten the story whenever possible. I cut out an entire page, and an entire sentence. Doesn’t sound like much? At only 700 words, the story is as streamlined as I can make it. Well, no. I just cut out one page and a sentence. Honing the text to the tightest possible is important for picture book texts.
When I’m asked to read someone’s manuscript, here’s my main comment: Cut it in half.
And a friend adds this: After cutting it in half, cut another 100 words.
Common Core. The Common Core education standards are a couple years now and their requirements are definitely on my mind. I am constantly consulting the standards for each grade level and working to make sure the picture book is useful in the classroom. Because I write for early elementary, I consider this a crucial aspect of what I do.
First, I focus on the story. Is the story itself compelling and interesting for the audience? If so, then can I add anything that will enhance it’s use in the classroom, without changing the essential story elements? For example, my picture book, THE JOURNEY OF OLIVER K. WOODMAN is now ten years old and still selling well. Part of the reason is that the story is told in letters and postcards. Of course, children’s learn about writing letters and postcards in early elementary, so this book is a natural for teachers to use as a mentor text. The story came first and demanded to be written in an epistolary (big word for letters) format. But after the story worked, then the layout and design decisions enhanced its usefulness in the classroom. Story first; but don’t ignore the book’s classroom usefulness.
Details. The Work-in-progress is about cats and I’m looking at about 20 cats that could be used in various places in the story. Which cat goes where? It’s a balancing act which requires me to know something about different cat breeds and match them to my story. I also have to carefully tabulate and re-tabulate which breeds I’ve used. I can’t use one breed twice, but each of the 20 breeds must be used. Check. No, move that one to this place. Re-check. It was a morning of detailed work!
Research.
I know–everyone loves cat videos. But have you ever seen a Devon Rex cat?
If you can’t see this video, click here.
In case you were wondering, according to the Cat Fancier’s Association, here’s the top 20 most popular cat breeds in 2013. (In other words, I am doing research to document and justify the breeds I am using in the story.)
RANK BREED
1 Persian
2 Exotic
3 Maine Coon Cat
4 Ragdoll
5 British Shorthair
6 Abyssinian
7 American Shorthair
8 Sphynx
9 Siamese
10 Devon Rex
11 Norwegian Forest Cat
12 Oriental
13 Scottish Fold
14 Cornish Rex
15 Birman
16 Burmese
17 Tonkinese
18 Siberian
19 Russian Blue
20 Egyptian Mau
Blog: Utah Children's Writers (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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I like to look for treasures on YouTube.
It's a bit like looking for treasures at the dump. The amount of junk one must sort through is appalling. Thank heaven for decent search engines.
I want to share with you now some of my favorite YouTube goodies that I found in the last month.
1. Howard Tayler on 'Who Needs Talent?'
This is only the first part. But watch all four parts. It completely changed the way I think about writing, 'talent', and what I have potential to do.
2. Dan Wells on 'Seven Point Story Structure'.
This is an AWESOME seminar that helped me a lot. I'm a budding outliner (I used to think I was a freewriter, but I think I'm changing with age) and having only ever freewritten my entire life, I was lost as to how to begin. This helped me through. First of five parts.
3. The Definition of Steampunk
Brilliant. Just brilliant.
4. World's Fastest Gun Disarm
Because maybe one of your characters needs to be able to do this. There are tutorials, but I'm fairly certain most of us can't be as fast as this dude.
Speaking of gun tutorials: do you have a character who needs to know how to intelligently use a firearm?
5. This guy has a channel with, like, 900 videos on how to shoot a gun, for newbies. He's got stuff from the difference between smoky and smokeless powder, to reasons why not to put your thumb behind the slide on a semi-automatic... which is what the next video is about. If you want details, this guy will give you details.
Hope something in this grab bag of a post was useful to you! Tell me about it in the comments, if you did.
Blog: TWO WRITING TEACHERS (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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The idea of description and detail has been on my mind since that conference with Kevin. When might writers pause in their narrative to describe with rich detail?
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There’s an excitement in the air! I’ve started a new novel project.
Here’s what I don’t want to happen:
I don’t want the excitement for this project to get bogged down and dribble away. It happens too easily, as life issues take over, as problems arise with the project, or just as the work drags on.
I don’t want to talk bad about this project to anyone. Sometimes, I fall into the habit of complaining. This chapter or that character just aren’t cooperating! Why is this so hard? ARGH! I hate this project because it’s not going like I want. Nope. None of that this time. I love this project and I’m excited about it. I think my readers will love it, too. Hurrah! It’s such a joy to be working on such a great project.
I don’t want this project to drag on forever. I have scheduled two months to get a first draft done and I’m working hard on keeping to that schedule.
Here’s things I want to happen:
Joy. Excitement. Productivity.
Scheduling the Project
When faced with a big project, how do you break it down into manageable pieces?
I’ve already gone through the process of deciding what kind of novel this will be. Now, I just need to write it.
Here are the steps I plan to follow:
One page synopsis. I’ve written a one-page summary of the story, knowing full well that it would need to be fleshed out when the time comes. Now that the time is here, it’s easy to see where I want the story to go. There are huge gaps in the story, of course, but the one-page synopsis grounds the story in some particular issues.
Subplots to Detailed Plot.I am taking a day to flesh out some of the subplots. For example, one subplot will involve kids planning a parade. I spent today researching fun ideas to add to the parade and parade planning. Did you know that some parades these days require horses to wear diapers? It’s true. Horse poop on city streets–though once the norm–is now a no-no. There are special bags which are strapped to horses to catch their “meadow muffins.” (Now, see, isn’t that great language to use in a book? Meadow muffins. Horse apples.) Real life can be stranger than fiction: horse diapers.
I’ll take a day to research the other subplots and layout some ideas for developing the plot lines. Then, I’ll spend a day picking and choosing scenes to include and weaving them into the main plot line to create a detailed plot. That breaks the task of plotting into steps that I can manage. By approaching it from the subplot angle, I am free to make leaps and make errors: it doesn’t matter, it’s just a subplot. But in the end, I am sure that I’ll find some unique things to add to this story to make it more fun and funny.
WARNING: THIS 24-SECOND VIDEO SHOWS A HORSE POOPING. Your kids will probably love it!
If you can’t see this video, click here.
Characterization and character continuity. With a detailed plot in hand, I’ll double check the characterization needed. Because this is a second book in a series, much of the characterization is set up and I’ll need to continue it on, create an emotional arc for this book and make sure there is continuity. The first step will be the emotional arc for the character. I’ll need to make sure the external plot echoes the internal arc. This means a detailed summary of the story that includes the plot, subplots and character issues.
Revise. With a very long, detailed synopsis of the story, I’ll look for holes in logic, characterization and plot.
Write. Finally, I’ll use the synopsis to create a full draft–by Halloween.
This is a slightly different process for me, with more upfront planning. I’d like the full synopsis to be about 1/3 of the finished book, which will be enough detail to help me get the whole story done.
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My swimmer will see the world differently than your detective. But how? |
As I picked through my manuscript, something hit me. Yes, I had enough detail for the reader to experience the setting, but I hadn’t chosen the details that my character would most likely notice. I’m a very visual person with an acute sense of smell and am easily distracted by sound, thus I had sight, smell and sound covered.
What was missing were the kinesthetic details, details that focus on movement and how things feel to the touch. My character is a swimmer who is always being told by his teachers to be still. Clearly, I needed to work motion details into my story, because these are the kinds of things that my character would notice.
As I started working attention to motion into my story, I realized that my character may not see the world in black and white, but he would definitely see it in terms of constricting stillness vs glorious motion. That’s just how he’s wired.
Another character that I’ve been working with is a flashy girl who lives in a circus. She does everything with a certain flash and pizzazz so that is how she divides things – allowed to use her pizzazz vs not allowed to use her pizzazz.
A character who can speak to wolves notices more to do with scent and sound than do her fellow humans.
The character who is an incarnation of Persephone is still giving me fits. Obviously, she’s going to be tuned into plants and the natural cycle, but I’m not sure how it will color her perceptions of those around her.
Do you know your characters well enough to know how they see the world? What details would they notice that you would overlook? What is their good vs their bad? Remember, you are answering this for your character. If her answers too closely resemble your own, you might have a bit more work to do.
–SueBE
Read more of SueBE's writing at her blog.
Blog: WOW! Women on Writing Blog (The Muffin) (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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Earlier this week, while I proofread a few chapters from my current WIP, a scary thought raced through my mind.
'It's so....white.'
Translated, it's completely vanilla and filled with cream-colored references. Even the main female character is decked out in white in almost every scene. (And no, she is not a doctor, and trust me, she's no angel.)
Now, I'm not saying the writing is bad, it's just lacking color in these chapters.
Kind of disappointing coming from a writer with "Mango Crush" on her office walls.
But the revelation reminded me of an exercise I would use with freshman English students who struggled to bring color to their writing.
Perhaps I'd asked them to describe the sun, bring it to life through color. What would I get? Yellow. Plain ol' yellow.
I would ask them to describe the shade of yellow. Is it the color of butter? Of a buttercup along a country road? The yellow of a middle-of-July sunflower? Post-it note yellow?
"Just yellow," students would reply.
The next day, they would be in for a surprise. Paint samples littered a tabletop. (Thank you, locally-owned hardware store.)
"Show me what kind of yellow."
Once they saw the connection between a concrete example and word choice, their writing improved.
I don't want my writing to be 'just yellow' - or just plain ol' white - for that matter. I want vibrant words to run down the pages.
After a trip to the lumber yard, Eros Pink, Adriatic Sea, and Jargon Jade complete the scenes, along with a tinge of Crescent Moon White.
by LuAnn Schindler. Read more of LuAnn's work at her website.
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This last week I have been doing a last look through of a manuscript I am sending out for publish soon. Something kept nagging me and I knew some little but significant tidbit was missing, but I couldn't grasp what it was. Since I was looking at the hardcopy and not the computer file, I was slow to realize the problem.
I've always kept my hardcopy in three sections, one on top the other in a criss-cross pattern. Only when I was stacking the papers did it dawn me. In my mind the book is in three parts, but I had yet to do a Part One, Part Two and Part Three in the computer to signify the division in the book. That little detail makes a big difference in my story. It will keep readers on track and not wonder why the big transition without some indication of a shift in the book.
In my everyday life I was lacking a small detail as well. My granddaughters and I are going swimming today and they requested chicken wraps for our picnic. I liked their thinking and thought what a treat that would be come lunchtime. Except I forgot my kitchen is still under construction. I have no stove to bake the chicken and I was feeling too lazy to go to the store to purchase cooked chicken. After the storm passed last night, I grilled the chicken and all was well, or so I hoped.
This morning I had to wait for my girls to arrive because I couldn't remember which they preferred on their wraps: mayo or ranch dressing! I sure didn't want to go to all the trouble of making a fresh chicken wrap and have the wrong sauce on it! Little details make all the difference.
So for those looking for an easy and tasty lunch, below is my simple recipe for chicken wraps:
2 cooked/grilled chicken breasts, season as desired, shredded
one avocado
bacon, cooked, crumbled or sliced into small pieces
spinach or your favorite lettuce, (paper towel to dry)
onion (opt) my girls said NO to that!
ranch dressing or another dressing of your choice
black olives
grape-size tomatoes
tortilla shells (I prefer the refrigerated ones)
shredded cheese (I prefer a blend of cheddar and jack)
Assemble:
spread dressing over tortilla
layer ingredients starting with cheese and spinach
add the other ingredients: the trick is not to fill it too full.
Fold the ends in and roll, secure the edge with a dab of dressing or stab with a toothpick.
Cut in half about 3/4 way through
store in a water/air tight container and refrigerate until time to eat
This usually makes 4-6 wraps, depending on the size of the chicken breasts.
Serve with more sauce if desired.
Enjoy!
Don't forget the napkins!
Til next time ~
DL Larson
Blog: DIANE SMITH: Illo Talk (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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It's kind of hard to believe, but now that I've put in the trees, I feel like I'm nearing the end. I still have work to do in each panel, but at this point, it's details, fine tuning, and fairy minor adjustments. If all goes well, I'd say that I have about a week of additions and "fixings". I'll have to move the panels around in order to finish some parts - to make sure that the continuity from one panel to the next is accurate. Then, I'd give myself another week of obsessively staring, analyzing, and more fixing. After that, I guess it will be time to put the protective top varnish on and seal it.
Yesterday, I put in several more trees and shrubs and extended some of the yellow flowers. I may add a few more in, but probably not much.
I also started to put in the pumpkin stems, although I think I'll switch them to the browner side. But, as you can see, this panel has really come together!
Blog: I.N.K.: Interesting Non fiction for Kids (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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Blog: Darcy Pattison's Revision Notes (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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Reread your story.
Does it surprise you at any point? Does it keep YOUR interest?
Recently I reread a story that I had not read for a while, long enough for me to start to be fuzzy on details. Here are some things that struck me.
“To see Mrs. Lopez’s smile was to understand the amazing abilities of a mouth: her mouth was as wide as a whale’s and everyone knew her business–and the silver in her molars.”
“My heart went skippety-skip. A sideways glance: Marj’s freckles looked friendly enough, even if she wasn’t smiling. But she didn’t answer the question, didn’t say she was my mother.”
What are you noticing afresh in your reading these days?
Blog: DIANE SMITH: Illo Talk (Login to Add to MyJacketFlap)
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Well, I've finally made it into panel 5 (and it's turned against the side wall of the garge - hence, turning the corner)!
Just started mapping out the floor tiles and fixing some proportions. While the projector was incredibly handy, working from a very small original painting means that little distortions are increased in my tracings - mole hills become mountains. So, some adjustments to the chef are necessary. Also, the floor tiles are taking a little bit of time to get a sense of fairly balanced visual perspective without being overly hard-edge and mechanical. But, I'm enjoying working on something different for a while.
The toasting figures are in a good place for now - I'm content with the direction that they're going. I was not able to capture much detail in the original proposal because the scale was too small, so I've been making them up as I paint. I'm not working from any models either - they're basically imaginary composites.
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Today we bring you another installment of Youth Media Movers and Shakers. We’ve culled through industry publications looking for the recent executive placements we think you should know about. If you have executive news that you want us to... Read the rest of this post
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I've been thinking about how we writers use words, and what those words memorable. What fixes a passage, or a character, in a reader's mind?
I've decided it comes down to details and generalities, and that there is a place for both of them in a book. A need for both of them.
Details bring life to a scene, but maybe it is the generalities in a scene that connect it to the reader's life. Connection. That's what it all comes down to, isn't it? The ability to cut right through the crap of verbs and nouns and the occasional shining adjective and show with piercing clarity a problem, or a thought the reader had on the edge of her tongue or in that place that Kipling called the back kitchen of consciousness.
Consider these opening passages:
"My small Southern hometown is beautiful in the haunting way an aging debutante is beautiful. The bones are exquisite, but the skin could use a lift. You could say my brother, the architect, is Ivy Spring's plastic surgeon.
I shuffled through a relentless late-summer downpour toward on eof his renovation projects... our home. I couldn't care less about the weather. I was in no hurry. My brother might know what to do with feng shui and flying buttresses and other architectural things, but with me? He had no clue."
"The other ship hung in the sky like a pendant, silver in the ether light cast by the nebula. Waverly and Kieran, lying together on their mattress of hay bales, took turns peering at it through a spyglass. They knew it was a companion vessel to theirs, but out here, in the vastness of space, it could have been as tiny as a OneMan or as immense as a star--there were no points of reference."
"Good girls don't walk with boys. Even good boys--and Zenn is the best. He strolled next to me, all military with his hands clasped behind his back, wearing the black uniform of a Forces recruit. The green stripes on his shirtsleeves flashed with silver tech lights, probably recording everything. Who am I kidding? Those damn stripes were definitely recording everything."
"It starts with a crack, a sputter, and a spark. The match hisses to life.
'Please,' comes the small voice behind me.
'It's late, Wren,' I say. The fire chews on the wooden stem in my hand. I touch the match to each of the three candles gathered on the low chest by the window. 'It's time for bed.'
With the candles all lit, I shake the match and the flame dies, leaving a trail of smoke that curls up against the darkened glass."
What do these passages have in common? Metaphors. Similes. Images painted in words. Detail that lends authority. We have a very specific view into each of these worlds, not a with a generic town, or a generic boy, or even a generic match. The specificity in each of these openings lets us trust the narrator. We know immediately that we're in good hands, preparing to hear the truth rolling out in the guise of fiction, and--perhaps most importantly--that we've never heard truth, this truth, stated in quite this way.
Look at these:
"Aunt Prue was holding one of the squirrels in her Add a Comment
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Tammi Myers wrote the following on our Facebook Page in response to the post I wrote on Tuesday: Sometimes we repeat jargon with the goal of being consistent with other grade levels- but that just gives us a class of kids who can parrot the terms with no real understanding. Tammi makes an excellent point. [...]
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I adore beautiful PBs. I enjoy reading and re-reading them with my children, my grandchildren, any children who will sit still long enough to allow me to read to them! I'm trying to master the craft of writing great PBs, also. Let's just say I apparently have a looooooong way to go. One of the things that has always puzzled me about the process is knowing what details to include in my text and
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My daughter shook a paper in front my face, with her other hand on her hip she said, “I lost points because she [the teacher] said I have to add more details. How do you add more details to this?” I looked at her paper. At the top of the worksheet she wrote each of [...]
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by Scott Rhoades
I decided to dust off my 1899 edition of Mark Twain's The American Claimant and Other Stories and Sketches, one of two Twain novels that I don't think I've ever read. It starts with a short little thing that I have read before, but it's a good reminder to all authors. It reminds me somewhat of Steinbeck's "Hooptedoodle" prologue to Sweet Thursday, about not overdoing the deatails that get in the way of a story, only, of course, Twain beat Steinbeck by several decades. So, here it is, for your enjoyment and edification.
THE WEATHER IN THIS BOOK
No weather will be found in this book. This is an attempt to pull a book through without weather. It being the first attempt of the kind in fictitious literature, it may prove a failure, but it seemed worth the while of some dare-devil person to try it, and the author was in just the mood.
Many a reader who wanted to read a tale through was not able to do it because of delays on account of the weather. Nothing breaks up an author's progress like having to stop every few pages to fuss-up the weather. Thus it is plain that persistent intrusions of weather are bad for both reader and author.
Of course weather is necessary to a narrative of human experience. That is conceded. But it ought to be put where it will not be in the way; where it will not interrupt the flow of the narrative. And it ought to be the ablest weather that can be had, not ignorant, poor-quality, amateur weather. Weather is a literary specialty, and no untrained hand can turn out a good article of it. The present author can do only a few trifling ordinary kinds of weather, and he cannot do those very good. So it has seemed wisest to borrow such weather as is necessary for the book from qualified and recognized experts--giving credit, of course. This weather will be found over in the back part of the book, out of the way. See Appendix. The reader is requested to turn over and help himself from time to time as he goes along.
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Ammon Shea recently spent a year of his life reading the OED from start to finish. Over the next few months he will be posting weekly blogs about the insights, gems, and thoughts on language that came from this experience. His book, Reading the OED, has been published by Perigee, so go check it out in your local bookstore. In the post below Ammon shares his love of the obit section.
I am an unabashed fan of trivial information. I suppose this may rightfully be referred to as trivia, but I prefer the adjectival word to the plural noun – trivia has a limited range of meaning (each of which is more or less contemptuous), whereas trivial can refer to things having to do with math, chemistry, mediæval university studies, the place where three roads meet, and a host of other subjects. The trivial does not provide grand explanations for why the world is so, but it tells some small piece of history as a story, and in doing so grabs my attention in a way that great events never seem to. I suppose this is why I enjoy reading obituaries.
I find the obituaries to be by far the most interesting part of the newspaper. Not because I have a morbid fascination with death, but because this is where wonderful little details come out, things that would ordinarily not be classified as news. Yesterday I was reminded of one of my favorite obituaries of recent years, from the New York Times of September 12, 2008, titled “Martin K. Tytell, Typewriter Wizard, Dies at 94”.
It is a long obituary, and justifiably so, for even though it deals with (mostly antique) typewriters, the man it profiles was the foremost expert of this field, and deserves the column inches. It is a fascinating story, full of intrigue (Alger Hiss and the O.S.S.) and descriptions of a man who was entirely devoted to his field. Somewhere near the middle there a nugget of trivia, mentioned almost in passing: “An error he made on a Burmese typewriter, inserting a character upside down, became a standard, even in Burma.” I cannot help but wonder what the typewriter wizard’s feelings were on this – was he chagrinned at his mistake, or satisfied in a quiet fashion that his influence was such as to change a written language?
This has been on my mind of late because a friend has recommended a book on the subject: The Dead Beat, by Marilyn Johnson, a former obituary writer. I’ve not yet had the chance to read it, but it has the twin virtues of featuring a fine, under-written subject and possessing a great opening line: “People have been slipping out of this world in occupational clusters, I’ve noticed, for years.”
I wish that there were more of this in the news. It is not that I want to ignore the ugliness and strife of the world, and I am not calling for more feel-good human-interest stories in the news, but why must the unimportant yet interesting details wait until a person is dead before they can be widely known? It seems odd that death grants the permission to make the whimsical newsworthy.
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Today, for day 18 of my unofficial participation in National Novel Writing Month, I went back and started revising one of the middle chapters I just wrote. I had planned to do this later, but after looking at my original chapter plan, I found some fun ideas that I had forgotten and decided to put them in now.
It reminded me of one of the most important things when telling a story: Details.
I had forgotten this when I wrote these missing middle chapters. I was so focused on figuring out the structure, of how to join my already written beginning and end, that I forgot the details. No wonder I thought the chapters were bland.
When I started to put the details in, it started out slow, because I couldn’t see the scene properly in my head. I was missing the details. But once I got into my character’s head and started looking around the room, started thinking about all the cool things that could be going on during their conversation — inspired by what I had originally written in my chapter plans — the ideas came quickly and the story wrote itself.
Sometimes it’s not easy to remember details when we’re writing something for the first time because we’re so focused on just getting the story down. But without details, we can’t fully flesh out our story. And if we think about the details early on, it’s much easier to let the story flow.
What kind of problems do you have with your writing? Hopefully none!
Write On!
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My copy of When It’s the Last Day of School by Maribeth Boelts is missing. With the end of the school year being tomorrow, I’m a bit frantic about finding it. I’m sure it’s at school, in my picture book bookshelf filed under “B” for “Boelts,” however, I’m not 100% sure. Last [...]
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John Gardner, in The Art of Fiction, writes about the importance of using details, and concrete ones at that.
"�If the writer says 'creatures' instead of 'snakes,' if in an attempt to impress us with fancy talk he uses Latinate terms like “hostile maneuvers instead of sharp Anglo-Saxon words like 'thrash,' 'coil,' 'hiss,' 'spit' and 'writhe,' if instead of the deserts sand and rocks he speaks of the snakes’ 'inhospitable abode,' the reader will hardly know what picture to conjure up on his mental screen. These two faults, insufficient detail and abstractions where what is needed is concrete detail are common - in fact all but universal - in amateur writing."
Even if what I write is "junk" according to Gardner, I agree with that passage.
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SueBE--Thanks for this post. So many times, the little things have a huge impact. Going back over a short story, or--Yikes!--a manuscript is a great exercise.
Sometimes, if I need to add something physical, I will actually "role play" and act out the shift on the couch, the picking up of a heavy box--and try to bring it to life on paper.
Thanks for this post.
I think this is something a lot of us do--we (as the narrator and creator) get in the way of our character. I say that to my students a lot: don't forget to filter your setting details and everything in the story world through your character's eyes--this is especially true for first person and third person limited. I love your examples, too!