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Today we welcome to the blog Nikki Kelly, whose first novel, Lailah
, was published in October from Feiwel & Friends. Nikki has a most entertaining post for you today on how to choose the point of view of your protagonist. As fun as those gifs may be, make sure you red until the end as she offers some really apt advice.
Viewpoint Selection by Nikki Kelly
“Hi Nikki, I need your help! I have a story that I want to write but I’m a bit confused, I don’t know which point of view I should tell it from. How did you pick? What made you write your story from Lailah’s POV??? Please could you help me! I really want to get started but I don’t know what to do!
I originally posted my debut novel Lailah
, a community of readers and writers, back in December 2012. I am still very active on the platform and talk to young, aspiring writers every day. The above question hit my inbox a couple of weeks ago, but it’s not the first time I have been asked about viewpoint selection, and I’m sure it won’t be the last.
This question almost, always includes these exact words—‘which point of view is the right
The answer, I say… well, there is no right
I usually begin my reply by breaking down the most common, and simple, viewpoints:First Person
Writing as if you are the character: I, me, my. Third Person, limited
Writing with: he, she, they and pronouns such as his, hers, theirs.
Maintaining the narrative to the feelings, and ponderings of only the viewpoint character.Third Person, omniscient
Still writing with: he, she, they and pronouns such as his, hers, theirs.
This time, however, the narrator is ‘all knowing’ of all the characters thoughts and feelings. Omniscient gives a broader view of the story.
I go on to highlight that there are Pros…
…to writing in each viewpoint: First Person, the Pros include
The reader has an immediate connection to the viewpoint character.
Believability due to being ‘inside’ the viewpoint character's head.
Clear, and concise perspective.First Person, the Cons include
Your reader can only know what your viewpoint character knows.
If your viewpoint character is unlikable, you have to live in his/her head for as long as it takes you to tell the story!Third Person, limited, the Pros include
Can add suspense as the thoughts and feelings of the other characters remain unknown (only interpreted through the viewpoint character).
Can still connect closely with the viewpoint character. Third Person, limited, the Cons include
As with first person, the perspective is limited and your reader can only know what your viewpoint character knows.Third Person, omniscient, the Pros include
Can connect with more characters in the story in a more intimate way.
Easier to manipulate the plot as there are more choices and options available.
Greater flexibility.Third Person, omniscient, the Cons include
The reader has more distance from your viewpoint character.
Multiple characters thoughts and feeling to juggle
I check in and ask if that all makes sense…
So then I suggest writing a paragraph from the story using all three viewpoints, and reading each one aloud. This helps to see which viewpoint comes most naturally when writing, and also helps to establish which works best for the story you are trying to tell.
Often, this then leads to…
I chose to write my debut novel Lailah
in first person, as it came more naturally, and it worked well for the story itself. Lailah is on a journey of self-discovery, and I wanted the reader to only know what she knew, to learn the truth of Lailah’s undiscovered nature, right along with her. This also worked really well for the reveals (there was, of course, some bread crumb dropping along the way!), and it worked especially well for the plot twists at the end of the book.
About the Author:
Nikki Kelly was born and raised only minutes away from the chocolately scent of Cadbury World in Birmingham, England. Lailah
is Nikki's first novel, and the first book in the Styclar Saga. She lives in London with her husband and their dogs, Alfie (a pug) and Goose (a chihuahua).
Visit her online at www.thestyclarsaga.com
Twitter: @Styclar Goodreads
About the Book:LAILAH
(The Styclar Saga #1)
The girl knows she’s different. She doesn’t age. She has no family. She has visions of a past life, but no clear clues as to what she is, or where she comes from. But there is a face in her dreams – a light that breaks through the darkness. She knows his name is Gabriel.
On her way home from work, the girl encounters an injured stranger whose name is Jonah. Soon, she will understand that Jonah belongs to a generation of Vampires that serve even darker forces. Jonah and the few like him, are fighting with help from an unlikely ally – a rogue Angel, named Gabriel.
In the crossfire between good and evil, love and hate, and life and death, the girl learns her name: Lailah. But when the lines between black and white begin to blur, where in the spectrum will she find her place? And with whom?
Gabriel and Jonah both want to protect her. But Lailah will have to fight her own battle to find out who she truly is.Amazon
Do you edit
censor yourself as you write? Before you even start to write?
We all second guess ourselves, at least to some extent. I do. Something happens, someone says something negative, or I read something brilliant by someone else, and the doubt demons start nibbling away at my self-confidence, whispering that what I'm doing isn't good enough.
There is so much noise in this business, so much whispering, so much doubt.
We can't let it take hold or we'll paralyze ourselves. Deadlines don't give into paralysis or doubt. : )
When I'm feeling like writing has become a chore and I need to regain the joy of writing, I find that there are a number of things I can do that practically guarantee to get me back on track.
If you're doing NaNoWriMo and feeling like you're overwhelmed, don't give up. Here are a few tricks I use to convince myself that I can keep going.
- Connect to what you love. If you're anything like me, the characters are what you love most about your manuscript, but if you're more invested in the plot or the concept, that's okay. Make a list of what you love and why you love it. Concentrate on rekindling that initial enthusiasm. Got it? Good. Now look at the scene or chapter you're currently writing and find a way to incorporate what you love into that chapter. Make your character do something that shows who she is, or demonstrate the "cool" aspects of your plot or concept.
- Write a letter. Get in the head of your character more deeply by writing a letter from her to someone else in her life. What is bugging her most? What does she need someone to know? What would she tell someone who wronged her if she had the chance? What would she say to her best-friend, right here, right now.
- Write a paragraph. Focusing on writing a thousand words or two thousand or more can be debilitating. The task can feel too huge when you're not feeling inspired. Instead of telling yourself you have to write ALL THE WORDS, tell yourself to write the first sentence in a paragraph, and then another sentence. All you have to write is one paragraph. Then another. You can quit any time, but once you've met your goal for the day, the words may come more easily.
Remember one more thing: your words may not be perfect, but they don't have to be when you first put them on the page. Focusing on word count can be debilitating, but words don't matter.
Hear me? Words don't matter.
Words change. Sentences change. Paragraphs and scenes and chapters may be deleted.
Focus on what the characters want and why your main character isn't getting what she wants, why it's almost impossible for her to get what she wants, and your story will write itself. Once it's down on the page and you are happy with the story, THEN you can focus on the words. In the meantime, focus on the joy of story! : )
Giveaway This WeekThe Young Elitesby Marie LuHardcoverPutnam JuvenileReleased 10/7/2014I am tired of being used, hurt, and cast aside.Adelina Amouteru is a survivor of the blood fever.
A decade ago, the deadly illness swept through her nation. Most of the infected perished, while many of the children who survived were left with strange markings. Adelina’s black hair turned silver, her lashes went pale, and now she has only a jagged scar where her left eye once was. Her cruel father believes she is a malfetto
, an abomination, ruining their family’s good name and standing in the way of their fortune. But some of the fever’s survivors are rumored to possess more than just scars—they are believed to have mysterious and powerful gifts, and though their identities remain secret, they have come to be called the Young Elites.Teren Santoro works for the king.
As Leader of the Inquisition Axis, it is his job to seek out the Young Elites, to destroy them before they destroy the nation. He believes the Young Elites to be dangerous and vengeful, but it’s Teren who may possess the darkest secret of all.Enzo Valenciano is a member of the Dagger Society.
This secret sect of Young Elites seeks out others like them before the Inquisition Axis can. But when the Daggers find Adelina, they discover someone with powers like they’ve never seen.
Adelina wants to believe Enzo is on her side, and that Teren is the true enemy. But the lives of these three will collide in unexpected ways, as each fights a very different and personal battle. But of one thing they are all certain: Adelina has abilities that shouldn’t belong in this world. A vengeful blackness in her heart. And a desire to destroy all who dare to cross her.It is my turn to use. My turn to hurt.Purchase The Young Elites at AmazonPurchase The Young Elites at IndieBoundView The Young Elites on Goodreadsa Rafflecopter giveaway
We are thrilled to welcome Gretchen McNeil to the blog today. Gretchen is a woman of many talents being an opera singer and clown (what a lovely combination!) as well as an award-winning writer. She's had novels optioned by Hollywood and has sold rights internationally. And she's here to share with us today why the dreaded synopsis can actually be the professional writer's best friend!
Selling on Proposal, aka The Dreaded Synopsis by Gretchen McNeil
Of my seven contracted books, all but one – my debut Possess
– have sold on proposal. Some were sold from a synopsis plus fifty or so pages, some were just from a synopsis. But notice the common thread...
Selling a novel on proposal was, for me, the ultimate writing goal. “You mean I don’t have to write the entire book first? You mean I can finish the book knowing it already has a home (and a paycheck) lined up? Sign me up!”
It’s a double-edged sword, of course. While you’ve managed to charm an editor and publisher with your synopsis and/or pages, you still have to deliver a final manuscript on or before a due date, and the pressure of scheduling your creativity can be crippling.
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But I’m not here to talk about that part. I’m here to address that dreaded “S” word – the synopsis.
Like it or not, this is something that almost every author – published or unpublished – is going to have to deal with until the end of time. Synopsizing a completed novel is hard enough, but crafting one for a book you haven’t written yet? How is that possible
(I can actually hear you pantsers in the audience screaming out in abject terror. Don’t worry, hopefully this will be painless.)
I think the key for me in writing a proposal synopsis is remembering its purpose: it’s meant to be marketing material, a sales pitch to hook your audience. It’s not necessarily a roadmap for your finished manuscript, which I think is where a lot of people get hung up. Think of it like an elongated query letter as opposed to an intricate blow-by-blow of the book. There are certain important points you want to hit, while the details can be left for later.
What are those important points? For me, I aim to answer the following questions:
- Who is my main character?
- What does he/she want?
- What’s in his/her way?
- What does he/she do to get around that obstacle?
- What’s at stake if he/she fails?
The answer to Question #1 usually resides in the part of the book most people refer to as “the backstory” – elements that come out during the action, but aren’t necessarily enumerated at the beginning of the book. In a manuscript, that’s awesome. In a synopsis – which doesn’t have a lot of action – that’s problematic. But since this synopsis is a pitch, feel free to front load a paragraph or two of backstory to establish your character. It’s important to hook your target audience with this right off the bat.
Next you move into the First Act of your book (if you’re a proponent of Save the Cat
! beat sheets, you know of what I speak): basically establishing your supporting cast and your setting, and explaining the conflict, i.e. Questions #2 and #5. What does your character want? What’s at stake if she fails? Establishing this last question up front is important because it sets the stakes immediately which, hopefully, gives an editor the desire to keep reading.
So far, so good. And notice we haven’t had to really dive into much of the action of this book yet?
Unfortunately, that’s about to change. Questions #3 and #4 are basically the impetuses (impeti?) for action in your novel, the answers that force your main character to make a decision and go on his/her journey. The bad news is that this does require some sense of what actually happens in the novel, which is a scary concept since you haven’t actually written it yet. The good news is that all you really need to aim for are tentpoles: Event A! Disaster B! Turnaround C! Yes, this does require gazing into the crystal ball and trying to see the finished product, but it also allows for some leeway when you actually write the book. The specifics of the tentpoles can change, as long as, structurally, they still exist.
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Last but not least, the climax. I think this is the scariest part of writing a proposal synopsis because so much of the ending of a book relies on what happens in the middle…which hasn’t been written yet. So how do you tackle the dénouement?
I tend to dance around it a little bit, reestablishing the stakes and the difficult decision the hero is going to need to make in order to get what he/she wants, and then telling the reader exactly what the result of the climax will be. Not exactly what the climax
will be, but the result of it. For example, “Refusing to play by the rules, Katniss is able to beat the Capitol at their own game.” Spoilers
Notice I didn’t tell you how. Or that Peeta was involved. Just showed the outcome while teasing what may or may not happen in the climax. That’s how I get around, er, not really knowing
what’s going to happen when I’m writing a proposal synopsis.
So there it is. It’s not particularly detailed but it’s a blueprint for the book I’m going to write, hopefully with enough voice and tone and plot and promise that an editor will love it. Just remember, “synopsis” isn’t a four-letter word. In the end, it can be your best friend.
About the Author:
Author of YA horror novels POSSESS, TEN, and 3:59, as well as the new mystery/suspense series Don't Get Mad
, beginning in 2014 with GET EVEN and continuing in 2015 with GET DIRTY, all with Balzer + Bray for HarperCollins. Gretchen also contributed an essay to the Dear Teen Me
anthology from Zest Books.
Gretchen is a former coloratura soprano, the voice of Mary on G4's Code Monkeys,
and she sings with the LA-based circus troupe Cirque Berzerk. She is repped by Ginger Clark of Curtis Brown, Ltd.Website
About the Book:The Breakfast Club
meets Pretty Little Liars
in Gretchen McNeil’s witty and suspenseful novel about four disparate girls who join forces to take revenge on high school bullies and create dangerous enemies for themselves in the process.
Bree, Olivia, Kitty, and Margot have nothing in common—at least that’s what they’d like the students and administrators of their elite private school to think. The girls have different goals, different friends, and different lives, but they share one very big secret: They’re all members of Don’t Get Mad, a secret society that anonymously takes revenge on the school’s bullies, mean girls, and tyrannical teachers.
When their latest target ends up dead with a blood-soaked “DGM” card in his hands, the girls realize that they’re not as anonymous as they thought—and that someone now wants revenge on them
. Soon the clues are piling up, the police are closing in . . . and everyone has something to lose.Amazon
Today we welcome back to the blog Kimberley Griffiths Little, MG and YA award-winning author. Kimberley has a lot to celebrate this week. Her amazing historical YA novel, FORBIDDEN
, released Tuesday from HarperCollins, earned a coveted starred review in Booklist, and has already received a wonderful mention in USA Today
as one of 3 "Must-Read YA Romances"! We're so happy for her and can't wait to share her detailed and important craft tips with you.
Micro Level Revision – AKA “Line-Editing” by Kimberley Griffiths Little
You’ve been working on your story for awhile now, maybe months, maybe years . . . it’s drafted, rewritten several times, you’ve had feedback from trusted readers, the characters are deeply developed and motivated and three-dimensional, your plot is a rockin’ page-turner. You’re ready to start sending it out to agents! Yay!
WAIT! Hold the presses! That manuscript is actually not quite ready. Be sure you’ve done that final spit, polish and ***sparkle***. Here are a few tips to infuse it with professional polish. I’ve created a list for you to check off as you go through your manuscript once or twice more before hitting SEND.
And don’t worry if you begin thinking, “Ack! I do all these things!” We’re all guilty of every one at one point or another – and in every new manuscript we write! Thankfully, they’re all
: Look DEEPLY at your First Page(s); they’re the most difficult because there’s so much to set up in an interesting and intriguing way (characters, setting, hook, foreshadowing the problem). Those pages are the first impression to your reader, and sometimes, (unfortunately), the last impression.CHAPTER ENDINGS
: This is another area to make sure the chapter ends in the *right* spot with a cliffhanger or teaser that keeps the reader turning the pages. They can’t stop at “just one more chapter!”CHECK THE FIRST LINES
of every chapter and make sure they’re active and pull you right in, maintaining the action and emotion from the previous chapter. (It’s easy to have clunky transitions, especially when we work on a book over several months time).VOICE
: 1st Person, 3rd Person close, 2nd Person, Omniscient, Tenses. Double check that you’ve stayed in the same tense throughout. Play around with different POV and tenses to be sure it’s the strongest one for your story.PET WORDS, REPEATED WORDS
: Look for those words that you use too often. Everybody has a few and we don’t usually recognize them in ourselves. Ask your critique partner or beta readers to help you pick them out.CUT WEAK WORDS and PHRASES
: “a lot,” “really,” “something,” “always,” “sort of,” “look,” “kind of,” “that,” “slowly,” “very,” “realize,” “suddenly,” “it occurred,” “smile,” “nod,” “feel,” etc.TOO MANY DIALOGUE TAGS
: Especially after a comma. Use an action of the character to show their personality and what they’re doing in the scene and leave out the he said/she said with those added qualifiers such as: “I don’t know where it is,” she said, rummaging in the drawer,” OR “He spoke to the professor, twiddling his No. 2 pencil between his fingers.” Too similar phrasing becomes wearying if it’s constant.EXAMINE AND CUT
: “ly” words or qualifiers. “She said sharply.” Let the words or dialogue speak for themselves. Try not to “help” them by adding qualifiers.SPECIFICITY
: Watch for too many phrases or vagueness. Use specific verbs and details to bring the characters and setting alive.EXTRA THOUGHTS
: Delete extra internal character thoughts that don’t move the story forward, or that repeat what’s already been stated.EMOTION
: Watch for emotion that becomes heavy-handed or melodramatic.REARRANGING SENTENCES
: Look for how rearranging sentences or paragraphs might give your manuscript better flow, better clarification, and better pacing and punch.SENTENCE LENGTH
: Make sure your sentences are not all the same length. This tends to create a monotonous rhythm. Change it up. Vary short and long.DIALOGUE
: Watch out for dialogue that’s too “on the nose” (a common screenplay writing term). Go here to read more about this: http://www.scriptreaderpro.com/on-the-nose-dialogue/ NAMES
that fit your characters and setting: Remember “your” characters and “your” setting and choose appropriately.SHOW/TELL
: When using adjective, metaphors, similes, think about the setting, time period, and characters of your story. For instance, don’t use winter/snowy metaphors for a book set on a tropical island. Watch out for that weak verb, “to be.” Rewrite sentences to eliminate the verb “was.”A few more tips!
1. Make your manuscript’s font small and single-spaced so you can see the big picture of the book for pacing and repeated scenes; lay out the pages on the living room floor so you can see it all at once instead of trying to scroll through hundreds of pages on a computer screen.
2. Change the font and formatting by moving margins and using a different font that mirrors a published book. The story will suddenly look and read differently. You’ll find yourself tightening and editing in a whole new way.
3. To get the *big* picture of the entire novel, write down each chapter in 1-2 lines and watch for the story’s plot ARC and the character’s individual ARCs.
4. READ your manuscript aloud. You’ll catch clunky sentences and rhythm and repeated words, too!ABOUT THE BOOKForbidden by Kimberley Griffiths Little Hardcover HarperCollins Released 11/4/2014
In the unforgiving Mesopotamian desert where Jayden’s tribe lives, betrothal celebrations abound, and tonight it is Jayden’s turn to be honored. But while this union with Horeb, the son of her tribe’s leader, will bring a life of riches and restore her family’s position within the tribe, it will come at the price of Jayden’s heart.
Then a shadowy boy from the Southern Lands appears. Handsome and mysterious, Kadesh fills Jayden’s heart with a passion she never knew possible. But with Horeb’s increasingly violent threats haunting Jayden’s every move, she knows she must find a way to escape—or die trying. With a forbidden romance blossoming in her heart and her family’s survival on the line, Jayden must embark on a deadly journey to save the ones she loves—and find a true love for herself.
Set against the brilliant backdrop of the sprawling desert, the story of Jayden and Kadesh will leave readers absolutely breathless as they defy the odds and risk it all to be together.Purchase Forbidden at Amazon Purchase Forbidden at IndieBound View Forbidden on Goodreads
Plus, watch the trailer for FORBIDDEN below! Stunning live movie of a Middle Eastern actress in the desert with voice-over—camels—and pictures Kimberley took in the deserts of Jordan from her trip.
About The Author
Kimberley Griffiths Little was born in San Francisco, but now lives in New Mexico with her husband and three sons in a solar adobe home on the banks of the Rio Grande. Kimberley adores anything old and musty with a secret story to tell and makes way too many cookies while writing. She's stayed in the haunted tower room at Borthwick Castle in Scotland; held baby gators in the bayous/swamps of Louisiana, sailed the Seine in Paris; ridden a camel in Petra, Jordan; shopped the Grand Bazaar in Istanbul; and spent the night in an old Communist hotel in Bulgaria. Kimberley's Awards include: Southwest Book Award, Whitney Award for Best Youth Novel, Bank Street College Best Books of 2011 & 2014, Crystal Kite Finalist, and New Mexico Book Award Finalist.Website
From Debbie: Thanks to Paper Lantern Lit for letting Inkygirl premiere their new series of GET LIT videos. In this video, former Harpercollins and Razorbill editor Lexa Hillyer talks about how to establish the right WANTS and NEEDS for your characters:
Hello from Paper Lantern Lit, the "story architects!" We're so excited to premiere our new video series, Get Lit, on InkyGirl. Each Get Lit video will explore the blueprints to each of PLL's secrets of the storytelling trade.
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Today we have our very own First Five Pages Workshop Coordinator, Erin Cashman! Erin's novel, THE EXCEPTIONALS, is a YA fantasy that was named a Bank Street College of Education Best Children's Book.
WORLD BUILDING TIPS by Erin Cashman
Recently, someone commented to me that writing fantasy must be easy, since I can just make up what I need to fit my plot. I wish! As Lloyd Alexander said, “Once committed to his imaginary kingdom, the writer is not a monarch but a subject”. I think world building is both the hardest and the most wonderful part of writing a fantasy novel. Here are some of the techniques that help me:
1. Give your imagination free reign!
Do not edit your thoughts or ideas. During brainstorming sessions let your imagination soar. Take chances and risks while you write – try outlandish ideas. Editing comes later. Fantasy, is by its nature, a leap of faith, suspended belief, so – dream big. Write big.
2. Description and Parameters of the World
What is the nature of the magic? Who has it and who doesn’t? What are the rules? What are the consequences of breaking the rules? What does it cost? What does the world look like? Beware the dreaded info-dump, however. No one walks down the street and thinks about the color of the buildings, the thickness of the sidewalk – nor should your character think about the blue floating bridge that connects two purple fluffy clouds. The details of the world need to be woven in artfully and naturally – in revision after revision after revision.
3. Important Objects/Mechanics
For example, in Lord of the Rings, there is the one ring and the lesser rings, the Wizard’s staffs, etc. Harry Potter has many as well: the sorcerer’s stone, the sorting hat, the Sword of Gryffindor, etc. If you have these objects, try to have them serve another purpose besides a plot device. Rae Carson does an excellent job of this in The Girl of Fire and Thorns. The Godstone is crucial to the plot, it connects history to the present and informs the reader about the people. These objects should not be a crutch, but should add richness to the novel.
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4. Power/Abuse of Power
Who has power? Who wants power? In a fantasy world a central conflict often arises from the control, or the use and abuse of the magic. Why should magic be protected? Why would someone want to exploit it? Try to weave in good, evil and murky gray reasons and purposes for using/controlling/monopolizing the magic, and strong motivation.
Who is in charge of the fantasy world? What is their goal? Can those in power be believed and trusted?
6. History of The World
The history of my world often takes shape as my draft takes shape (I wish I was a plotter, but alas, I am a pantser). It comes to life through revision . . . after revision . . . after revision . . . you get the idea. I always draw (draw is a very grandiose word for what I do – it is more like scribble) a map. For The Exceptionals, a contemporary fantasy, I drew the school grounds, the tunnels, the tournament field, and the caves. My editor even asked me to send her a copy! If I’ve created a world, I make a map of the geography, and take notes on how it would have influenced the people and the government.
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How do people get around in your world? Are there space ships like in Star Wars? Do they teleport? Is there a portal – like the wardrobe in Narnia? Do they use magical creatures? Back to #1 – let your imagination go wild!
Think of the magic/powers/creatures that you have in your world. What would be a game or a competition that would arise from it? What about rituals? Expressions? Always be on the lookout for ways to include more world building, such as in currency, recreation, clothes, food . . . this adds layers to your world, and makes it more real to the reader.
Revise, revise, revise. Make sure the rules that you have created are followed, or have a consequence if not followed. With each new draft, look for ways to take what you have created and use it for more than one purpose. For example, if you have a magical creature, perhaps it can be used in a competition, or as a plot twist or for barter.
10. Find a Critique Partner and/or Writing Group
I really can’t emphasize this enough. Your CP should be someone that you trust who is not afraid of hurting your feelings. Consider what he or she says – the places in your manuscript that are muddled or confusing, the world building that worked, and more importantly, the world building that needs work. And then – you guessed it – revise, revise, revise!
About The Author
Erin's debut YA fantasy novel, THE EXCEPTIONALS, was named a Bank Street College of Education Best Children's Book. She primarily writes YA and middle grade fantasy while eating chocolate and drinking tea. She lives in Massachusetts with her husband and three children. You can find her here, as our First Five Pages Workshop Coordinator. She loves hearing from readers and writers, and you can contact her at erin (at) erincashman.com, or through her Website
or on Twitter
About The Book
Born into a famous family of exceptionally talented people, 15-year-old Claire Walker has deliberately chosen to live an average life. But everything changes the night of the Spring Fling, when her parents decide it's high time she transferred to Cambial Academy--the prestigious boarding school that her great-grandfather founded for students with supernatural abilities. Amazon
I am beyond excited about the post we have for you today. It's a little different, but the insight into the mind of both an author and an editor is information you can't pass up. Kate Brauning is the debut author of HOW WE FALL, releasing on November 11th! Read on for an amazing guest post!
Across the Desk: Thoughts from An Author-Editor by Kate Brauning
Hello, Adventurers! It’s Kate Brauning here, and I’m finding myself in an interesting position this year. I’ve worked in publishing for about four years now (still just learning), and as an editor with first Month9Books and now Entangled Publishing, I’ve worked with a lot of clients on a lot of books. But this year, my debut novel is being published (How We Fall, Merit Press 11/2014). I’ve been working toward being an author since I was a teen, so this is really a dream come true for me—but it also means I’m on the receiving end of what I’ve been handing out to my clients. Because I’m getting to see across the desk a bit, I’m here to chat about how editors and authors see the same issues.The Manuscript:Author:
When my agent first offered me representation, and when the offer for How We Fall came through, I was so nervous. What if they didn’t love my book as much as they said? What if they liked my book, but not me? And what if later on, my book got lost in the shuffle? Of course, I worried through all these things with my critique partners (and my poor agent), and I’ve seen the same fears go around in the writing community. They’re pretty normal concerns—and it’s great for authors when an editor recognizes that and reaches out to help stabilize those concerns. My own editor has made a point to congratulate me on good news and keep up with issues, even though we’re long past edits, and it really helps assure me that they still love my book and they’re working hard to make sure it does the best it can.Editor:
In my experience, an editor will almost never acquire a book he or she doesn’t love. Publishing is a business, but it’s a business that requires passion. We have to advocate so hard and so long for our books, and even read them 5+ times, that it’s not smart business to acquire a book we don’t genuinely love. And it’s not smart business to work with an author we can’t work with, either. We love you and your book, and even if we have other books and authors on our lists, working hard for your book is what we signed up for.Editorial Letters:Author:
Getting your editorial letter can be exciting and terrifying. But it can be tough to hear what needs to be improved in our books—chances are we’ve been through multiple heavy rounds of revisions already. We may even be working a newer project that has grabbed us. Switching back and forth between projects can be tough, and along with handling the editorial letter itself and knowing how to apply the changes our editor is asking for, comes the insecurity of wondering how much our editor could really love the book if it has all these flaws. Positive comments and support are really helpful to us, both in the edit letter and in general, even just to help us know that yes, this part works. (If my editor sends me an encouraging note or tells me something she loves about my book, it makes my day.) Editorial letters can even be confusing, or contain notes that we might agree with, but can’t see how to apply. When revising How We Fall, I had notes I knew how to apply, but it meant I had to make other changes I didn’t know if my editor would like. Beyond being stressful, those edits can raise a lot of questions and tough issues.Editor:
A good editor breaks down both what works and what needs to be sharper in a manuscript. I want my clients to know the positives in the story so they can see why I love it, to help them see the book in a balanced manner, and to help offset how tough it can be to hear what needs to change. But it’s also the editor’s job to point out what needs cleaning up and sharpening. A heavy edit doesn’t mean we don’t like the book or that we think you did a lousy job revising. We’re working hard on your book because we love it. We’re helping you figure out how to get your vision on the page. It’s tough to see your own work objectively—we know that. It can be hard to see your own way out of plot or character issues. And we know you’ve been over this book many times, and it gets harder and harder to tell what’s working and what isn’t. Our focus is on balancing all that out and helping you make this book the best it can be. Because we love it. We’d be doing our jobs poorly and harming both the book and your career if we weren’t honest, so believe the compliments we give you, because we mean them! And if you need clarification or want to discuss ideas, let your editor know. We actually prefer it! We don’t want you floundering and confused. Definitely reply to the edit letter, after you’ve had the chance to think about it. We want to know what you’re thinking about the notes, and if you have questions or if the notes bring up other issues. We’re doing this with you.Deadlines:Author:
Sometimes I need a good, tight deadline to really make me tackle revisions. If I can dabble at it, it probably won’t get done. My revision rounds for How We Fall were incredibly tight, and I basically lived in my book until they were done. And my critique partners and writer friends went through the same thing when their edits came. Sometimes it went just fine and we tackled those revisions and got them sent off on time. But sometimes the deadlines went over a child or spouse’s birthday, or we got sick, or had crises at day jobs. Even more often, we floundered with how to apply the editorial notes, or discovered more that needed to be revised once we dug in. A caffeine-fueled, sleep-deprived stupor doesn’t make for smart, thorough revisions. But can you tell an editor that? Can you ask for an extension, or does that make you a “difficult author”? Should we tough it out, or talk to our editor?Editor:
Deadlines are a necessary part of the publication process, and it can cause problems with production and vendors if we have to move them around too much. However, we know you’re human, and life happens. I don’t know of anyone who would label an author “difficult” if a problem crops up during edits. The earlier you let us know, the better. It’s much easier to adjust earlier on than a few days before your deadline. Honest, upfront communication with your editor is always best. Of course, your editor may say, “sorry, there’s a big immovable reason we need it by X date,” but we’ll usually try to work with you! Rushed edits from a stressed author usually aren’t the author’s best work, and we want those revisions to be solid. The key is to communicate with us. We’ll try to reply in kind, and work out the issue together. It’s what we’re here for! Communication, really, is one of the biggest things I’ve learned from seeing both sides of the desk. Honest, open communication. Be respectful of your editor’s time, of course, and realize they have other clients they need to be fair to, too, but communicate. Ask the questions you have. Editors sometimes don’t realize what it is you might not know. Get clarification on edits—they’re trusting that if you’re confused, you’ll come back to them. They want you to! Great books take collaboration, and both the author and the editor are in this together, to make that book the best it can be and to help it reach its audience.
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Ever since Jackie moved to her uncle's sleepy farming town, she's been flirting way too much--and with her own cousin, Marcus. Her friendship with him has turned into something she can't control, and he's the reason Jackie lost track of her best friend, Ellie, who left for...no one knows where. Now Ellie has been missing for months, and the police, fearing the worst, are searching for her body. Swamped with guilt and the knowledge that acting on her love for Marcus would tear their families apart, Jackie pushes her cousin away. The plan is to fall out of love, and, just as she hoped he would, Marcus falls for the new girl in town. But something isn't right about this stranger, and Jackie's suspicions about the new girl's secrets only drive the wedge deeper between Jackie and Marcus--and deepens Jackie's despair. Then Marcus is forced to pay the price for someone else's lies as the mystery around Ellie's disappearance starts to become horribly clear. Jackie has to face terrible choices. Can she leave her first love behind, and can she go on living with the fact that she failed her best friend?Amazon
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Holly Schindler's third YA novel is being compared to The Lovely Bones, and in my opinion, that is amazing. Chilling, creepy and psychologically terrifying are words that come to mind when I hear that title, and reviews of FERAL are living up to and surpassing that.
Positive Reading Challenge by Holly Schindler
I’m not going to lie—I don’t think my writing degree did much for me, in terms of preparing me to become a professional writer. That’s not to discourage anyone currently enrolled in a writing program. I’m only speaking specifically of the writing program I attended in the late ‘90s / early ‘00s. In fact, many of the “truths” that were taught in my creative writing courses did me a disservice—I had to spend a few years unlearning the lessons that had filled my classrooms.
The one lesson that I’m grateful for—the one lesson that actually did help me—came from a literature professor, rather than a writing professor. In fact, he was by far my favorite professor in the entire department.
I met this particular professor when I signed up for his course in Literary Criticism. The class was a real struggle for me, in the beginning—so much so, I wound up seeking this professor out to try to gain some perspective, some insight into how to better attack the subject matter.
The advice this professor gave me was to forget “good.” It wasn’t my job to determine whether or not a book, poem, story, etc. was worth reading. Other people with far better credentials had, in fact, already determined the work was “good.” It had made its way into the literary canon. It was a classic. My job, as a literature student, was to figure out why. What separated this work from its contemporaries? Why did it survive while others produced in the same vein were forgotten?
When I graduated and was up to my eyeballs in rejections, I returned to that lesson. I checked out piles and piles of contemporary juvenile literature from my local library and attacked each book in the same way I’d once attacked the works I’d read for my literature professor. I went at it thinking, “Okay, somebody—an agent, an editor, a publishing house—has already decided this book is good. Why? What does this book have that made it a work to be acquired? What are this author’s strengths?”
That lesson, more than any other, helped me move toward publication. And I’d like to encourage anyone in pursuit of publication to do the same. For one year, I challenge you to find something good in each new book you read.
It’s easy, when you’re covered in rejection, to fall into a pattern of negative thinking. That negative thinking could be projected inward (“I’m no good. I’ll never be in the company of published authors. I don’t have anything new to offer. Who would read my work when so many other great authors are already out there?”) Or, the negative thinking could be projected outward (“Published books are crap. These published authors are no good. My work is better than this. The reason my work isn’t being accepted is because editors only want crap.”)
Another negative thought pre-published authors fall into is the idea that a rejection means that the editor or agent is telling you that your work isn’t of high enough quality. That’s not it at all. Yet again, I encourage you to forget “good.” A rejection isn’t an editor telling you that you’re not good enough. In fact, I once worked with an editor who told me that she picked books that she felt she could edit in a way no one else could…she picked books she felt she could make a unique kind of editorial thumbprint on. She said she did pass on many books that were well done—it was about finding the right match.
For one year, then, I encourage any would-be authors to ditch the negative thinking—which can really affect your writing, hamper it. Let go of the idea that a rejection is a way to tell you that you’re not good enough. Let go of the idea that you don’t measure up. And while you should always, always, always have faith and pride in your abilities, let go of the notion that the published books you check out are somehow inferior. Decide, every time you pick up a book, that you’re going to learn from it.
For one year, forget good. Look at each read objectively and ask yourself, “Why did this one make it?” You may decide that it was because of the concept, or because of the writer’s ability to handle a plot twist, or because of the author’s voice. You may see value in their character development or humor. Find some positive reason for the book being acquired.
Then challenge yourself. Figure out how to incorporate other authors’ admirable qualities into your work in your own way. I contend it’s far more useful to try to emulate something positive than it is to avoid something negative.
I would bet that by the end of the year, you will have made progress in some way. You’ll have graduated from form rejections to personalized rejections—or maybe even signed with an agent. I would, in fact, love to hear your own stories of how this “Positive Reading Challenge” helped your own publication pursuit. Take the challenge, and at the end of the year, shoot me a message. (I can always be reached through my website or social media). I’d love to know how it impacted you.
I’m grateful every day for my prof’s lesson—it helped me in ways I never could have anticipated, back when I was a literature student trying to navigate through his class. It actually turned out to be the best professional advice I ever received. I’m betting that it’ll help you, too. I can’t wait to hear how.
About The Author
Holly Schindler is the author of the critically acclaimed A BLUE SO DARK (Booklist starred review, ForeWord Reviews Book of the Year silver medal recipient, IPPY Awards gold medal recipient) as well as PLAYING HURT (both YAs).
Her debut MG, THE JUNCTION OF SUNSHINE AND LUCKY also released in ’14, and became a favorite of teachers and librarians, who used the book as a read-aloud. Kirkus Reviews called THE JUNCTION “...a heartwarming and uplifting story...[that] shines...with vibrant themes of community, self-empowerment and artistic vision delivered with a satisfying verve.”
FERAL is Schindler’s third YA and first psychological thriller. Publishers Weekly gave FERAL a starred review, stating, “Opening with back-to-back scenes of exquisitely imagined yet very real horror, Schindler’s third YA novel hearkens to the uncompromising demands of her debut, A BLUE SO DARK…This time, the focus is on women’s voices and the consequences they suffer for speaking…This is a story about reclaiming and healing, a process that is scary, imperfect, and carries no guarantees.”
Schindler encourages readers to get in touch. Booksellers, teen librarians, and teachers can also contact her directly regarding Skype visits. She can be reached at hollyschindlerbooks (at) gmail (dot) com, and can also be found on her Website
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ABOUT THE BOOKFeralby Holly SchindlerHardcoverHarperTeenReleased 8/26/2014The Lovely Bones meets Black Swan in this haunting psychological thriller with twists and turns that will make you question everything you think you know.
It’s too late for you. You’re dead. Those words continue to haunt Claire Cain months after she barely survived a brutal beating in Chicago. So when her father is offered a job in another state, Claire is hopeful that getting out will offer her a way to start anew.
But when she arrives in Peculiar, Missouri, Claire feels an overwhelming sense of danger, and her fears are confirmed when she discovers the body of a popular high school student in the icy woods behind the school, surrounded by the town’s feral cats. While everyone is quick to say it was an accident, Claire knows there’s more to it, and vows to learn the truth about what happened.
But the closer she gets to uncovering the mystery, the closer she also gets to realizing a frightening reality about herself and the damage she truly sustained in that Chicago alley….
Holly Schindler’s gripping story is filled with heart-stopping twists and turns that will keep readers guessing until the very last page.Purchase Feral at AmazonPurchase Feral at IndieBoundView Feral on Goodreads
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Rachel Wilson is the debut author of the YA novel, DON'T TOUCH, the heart wrenching story of a girl suffering a severe anxiety disorder. She has been likened to Laurie Halse Anderson, and in my books, that is some of the highest praise you could achieve as an author. DON'T TOUCH hit shelves on September 2nd.
Creating a Treatment for Your Book Trailer by Rachel Wilson
When my director friend Matt Miller said he wanted to direct a trailer for Don’t Touch, I did cartwheels. When he asked what my dream trailer might look like, I began to twitch and mumble.
Time for a treatment. Planning a book trailer can be daunting. If you’re working with a director or photographer, a treatment will put everyone on the same page. Even if you’re making the trailer all by your lonesome, a clear plan for what you intend to shoot is a must.
A treatment outlines what will be seen on screen—it gives a sense of tone and reads in present tense. Yours may look like a screenplay script, or it may read more like a synopsis of shots. The format is not so important as helping the team envision the final product and creating a guide for shooting.
Here are a few strategies based on what I learned while working on the trailer for Don’t Touch:Ask what the central message is that you want viewers to take away from your trailer.
This will be close to your one-line synopsis and hint at the central conflict of the book. For Don’t Touch, we wanted to make it clear that Caddie has a fear of touching other people’s skin and that this conflicts with her desire to be close to Peter.Collect key text from the book that you might want to use in your trailer.
This might be narration or dialogue; it might be heard during the trailer or spoken as a voice over or in-scene. For us, a couple of lines of narration that captured our central message jumped out almost immediately. Make a list of images from the book
that might work in your trailer. Don’t limit yourself at this point—just brainstorm. And get descriptive. Your character is tumbling downhill—do you picture that as a series of jump cuts or in slow motion? What time of day is it? Do we see this from a distance, or is it more important to see a close-up of the terror in his eyes? Use cinematic language.
Your treatment needn’t be as rigid or specific as a script, but if you have a specific vision for certain moments (slow motion, extreme close-up, quick cuts), including those can help the whole team visualize together. Is there a controlling image that might serve as an anchor
for the rest of your trailer? For us, this was Caddie falling into the swimming pool. There’s no rule that says you need to work in chronological order—one strong image might be all you need, or you might choose, as we did, to use a single image as a frame for the rest, beginning, middle, and end.Group images by location and prioritize.
Each location adds time for travel and setting up equipment, and some will require payment or favors to access. For our one-day shoot, we aimed for no more than three locations. Can you avoid a hard-t0-find setting by using an extreme close-up? Must that shot take place in a classroom, or could it happen in the bedroom you’re already using? Arrange and rearrange.
Play with different combinations of image and text until your treatment has a sense of progression that you like. Find visual connection between images.
This helps pull the viewer through the trailer, creates visual interest, and tells a story on a subconscious level. In our treatment, we set up a parallel between Caddie stepping onto stage for an audition and stepping up to the edge of the pool. For her, there’s an emotional connection between those two acts. Our editor, Travis Hockswender, found other parallels in our footage that we hadn’t planned on. Notice around 0:47 how Caddie’s spin flows into Peter turning to sit down. Be flexible with your treatment in shooting and editing.
That moment at 0:47 wasn’t in our treatment but rather a happy accident. Likewise, the moments of Caddie and Peter mirroring each other’s hands were improvised during our shoot. The treatment is only a guide, so allow for discovery.Time the treatment.
Set a timer and, as best you can, speak or visualize through the shots you have planned. Short is best both for keeping attention and for conserving resources. Think of your trailer as the visual equivalent of a poem—just like every word in a poem counts, every shot in your trailer has to earn its place.
Most importantly, get inspired.
A trailer isn’t worth the trouble if you aren’t going to have fun making it, so put on your film-making hat, watch the trailers for books similar to yours, gather inspiring images, and tap into the same creative energy you bring to your writing!
For the curious, here’s a peek at what the first moments of our treatment looked like on paper: MUSIC
Image: Caddie’s feet, in shoes, stepping to the edge of a pool.
Image: Caddie stepping to the edge of a high school stage.
CU on Caddie’s hand fidgeting, clenching at her side.CADDIE: I am Caddie Finn.
CU of Caddie blinking in the glare of stage lights. Raises a hand to shield her eyes.VO: There are so many things in the world that can cause pain…
Image: Overhead of a trust circle—students being passed around the center.
Image: Caddie’s hands and Peter’s almost touching/coming together.
Image: Caddie and Peter’s mouths close up on the verge of a kiss. VO: And people—people do it best. Watch The Book Trailer Below!
ABOUT THE BOOKDon't Touchby Rachel M. WilsonHardcoverHarperTeenReleased 9/2/2014
Step on a crack, break your mother's back,
Touch another person's skin, and Dad's gone for good . . .
Caddie has a history of magical thinking—of playing games in her head to cope with her surroundings—but it's never been this bad before.
When her parents split up, Don't touch becomes Caddie's mantra. Maybe if she keeps from touching another person's skin, Dad will come home. She knows it doesn't make sense, but her games have never been logical. Soon, despite Alabama's humidity, she's covering every inch of her skin and wearing evening gloves to school.
And that's where things get tricky. Even though Caddie's the new girl, it's hard to pass off her compulsions as artistic quirks. Friends notice things. Her drama class is all about interacting with her scene partners, especially Peter, who's auditioning for the role of Hamlet. Caddie desperately wants to play Ophelia, but if she does, she'll have to touch Peter . . . and kiss him. Part of Caddie would love nothing more than to kiss Peter—but the other part isn't sure she's brave enough to let herself fall.
From rising star Rachel M. Wilson comes a powerful, moving debut novel of the friendship and love that are there for us, if only we'll let them in.Purchase Don't Touch at AmazonPurchase Don't Touch at IndieBoundView Don't Touch on Goodreads
ABOUT THE AUTHOR
Rachel M. Wilson is the author of the contemporary YA, DON'T TOUCH, forthcoming from HarperTeen, Sep. 2, 2014.
She graduated from Northwestern University and holds an MFA in Writing for Children & Young Adults from Vermont College of Fine Arts. Rachel grew up in Birmingham, AL, and she currently writes, acts, and teaches in Chicago, IL.Website
We are incredibly pleased and tickled pink to have Victoria Strauss on the blog today discussing some amazing writing techniques. Victoria is the widely acclaimed author of many young adult and adult novels and her advice is something to watch out for.
From Pantser To Planner: How I Changed My Writing Style by Victoria Strauss
I'm the original pantser. I hate planning and preparing. I'd rather just dive into whatever it is and learn as I go. This has gotten me into some messes, as you can imagine. Deciding to refinish a table and realizing halfway through that you really ought to know how to work with furniture stripper is not a recipe for a happy outcome.
Once upon a time, that was also how I wrote.
Nearly all my books require some degree of preliminary research. But after investing that initial effort, I just want to get on with the actual creation. When I first began writing, I'd start out with a premise, a setting, a compelling image for the beginning, and a definite plan for the end. The rest was a blank canvas that I couldn't wait to fill, discovering the bones of the story as I wrote it.
The problem was that the story never fell organically into place. I'd get interesting ideas for characters and scenes and plot points that sometimes worked, but often took me down irrelevant byways or banged me up against dead ends. Somewhere around the middle of the book (which never turned out to match any of the hazy ideas I might have had at the outset), I would realize that I’d gotten to a place that didn't fit either my planned ending or my already-written beginning, and be faced with the choice of throwing out a lot of material or making major changes to my basic concept. You'd think, since my concept was so nebulous, I wouldn't have a problem tossing it; but those strong beginning and ending images were (and still are) the essence of the book for me, what made me want to write it in the first place. I could never bring myself to abandon them.
In the end I always managed to pull it together. But it was exhausting and frustrating to do so much backtracking and re-writing, and with each book the process seemed to become messier. By my third novel, I felt that I was doing more fixing than creating--and if you do too much fixing, the seams start to show. Writing by the seat of my pants clearly wasn't working for me. I realized that if I wanted to continue with my writing career, something had to change.
So I decided to turn myself into a planner. No more pantsing. No more blank canvas. I'd discipline myself to craft my plot in advance, creating a road map to guide me all the way from A to Z.
to plan, exactly? Books on how to write offer a plethora of methods. Index cards. Whiteboards. Timelines. Checklists. Worksheets. Character questionnaires. Three-act structure. The Snowflake Method. Yikes.
Outlining (the kind of conventional I.A.1.a. outlining I learned in school) seemed most familiar. So for my fourth novel, that's what I decided to try. It totally did not work for me. It was too terse, too cold, too structured. Too boring.
Next I attempted a chapter-by-chapter synopsis. But that felt too arbitrary--how could I lock myself into a chapter structure before I knew the rhythm of the narrative?--and too choppy. I didn't want to jump from chapter to chapter like hopping across a series of rocks. I wanted the story to be all of a piece: to simply flow.
So I decided just to tell
the story from start to finish, imagining myself speaking to a rapt audience in the warm glow of a blazing campfire, with darkness pressing all around. This approach fit me much better. It felt creative; it had flow. I still took wrong turns and stumbled down blind alleys--but it's a lot easier to fix those in a synopsis than in a manuscript. And when I was done, I had a clear path from my blazing beginning image to the ending I was dying to write.
For reasons that had nothing to do with planning, I never did finish that fourth novel. But I've used this basic method ever since. First I figure out the core of the book: premise, setting, opening and conclusion. Then I build a bare-bones road map in my head, establishing the story arc and the main characters, making sure I can travel all the way to the end without getting lost in the middle. Then I write a synopsis, fleshing out the story bones and adding detail to plot and characters, but not drilling down to the level of individual scenes (unless an image really grabs me). For a 100,000-word book, my synopses generally run about 10-12 single-spaced pages. I also do brief character sketches as I go along.*
Once I'm done with all this preparation, I file it away and never look at it again. This may seem like a waste of effort. But writing from memory, without paying slavish attention to a plan, gives my pantser's soul the flexibility it needs, allowing room for change and inspiration, for those "aha" moments that, for me, are the most exciting part of writing. Because I do have a plan, however--because I've fallen into most of the holes and backtracked out of most of the dead ends in advance--I don't veer off track the way I used to; and where I do diverge, it's productive rather than destructive. My finished books nearly always differ in significant ways from my initial road map. But the important plot turns don't change.
This melding of planning and improvisation is the best balance I've found between the creative license I crave and the structure I need.
Changing my approach to writing has also taught me something important about writing itself: there is no "correct" or "best" way of doing things--only what's best for you
. I can't count the number of times I've heard that planning destroys inspiration, or that only hack writers plan, or that real
creativity is letting the story find you, not the other way around. Conversely, most of the highly-recommended planning techniques I tried felt too constraining or too boring.
Trial and error is the key. Don't be afraid to experiment. If something isn't working for you, don't be afraid to abandon it and try something new. It took me a long time, and many mistakes, to figure out my ideal method. But eventually I found my way.
You will too.
* If worldbuilding is needed, as with my fantasy novels, I work that out in between the in-my-head planning and the written synopsis (I've written about my worldbuilding method here: http://www.victoriastrauss.com/advice/world-building/).
About The Author
Victoria is the author of nine novels for adults and young adults, including the Stone fantasy duology (The Arm of the Stone and The Garden of the Stone) and Passion Blue and Color Song, a pair of historical novels for teens. In addition, she has written a handful of short stories, hundreds of book reviews, and a number of articles on writing and publishing that have appeared in Writer’s Digest, among others. In 2006, Victoria served as a judge for the World Fantasy Awards.
Victoria is the co-founder, with Ann Crispin, of Writer Beware, a publishing industry watchdog group that provides information and warnings about the many scams and schemes that threaten writers. She received the Service to SFWA Award in 2009 for my work with Writer Beware.
Victoria lives in Amherst, Massachusetts.Website
ABOUT THE BOOKColor Songby Victoria StraussHardcoverSkyscapeReleased 9/16/2014
By the author of the acclaimed "Passion Blue," a "Kirkus Reviews" Best Teen Book of 2012 and "a rare, rewarding, sumptuous exploration of artistic passion," comes a fascinating companion novel.
Artistically brilliant, Giulia is blessed?or cursed?with a spirit's gift: she can hear the mysterious singing of the colors as she creates them in the convent workshop of Maestra Humilit?. It's here that Giulia, forced into the convent against her will, has found unexpected happiness and rekindled her passion to become a painter?an impossible dream for any woman in 15th century Italy.
But when a dying Humilit? bequeaths Giulia her most prized possession?the secret formula for the luminously beautiful paint called Passion blue?Giulia realizes she's in danger from those who have long coveted the famous color. Faced with the prospect of a life in the convent barred from painting as punishment for keeping Humilit s secret, Giulia is struck by a desperate idea: What if she disguises herself as a boy? Could she make her way to Venice and find work as an artist's apprentice?
Along with the truth of who she is, Giulia carries more dangerous secrets: the exquisite voices of her paint colors and the formula for Humilit s Passion blue. And Venice, she discovers, with its gilded palazzos and masked balls, has secrets of its own. Trapped in her false identity in this dream-like place where reality and reflection are easily confused, and where art and ambition, love and deception hover like dense fog, can Giulia find her way?
This stunning, compelling novel explores timeless themes of love and illusion, gender and identity as it asks the question: what does it mean to risk everything to pursue your passion?Purchase Color Song at AmazonPurchase Color Song at IndieBoundView Color Song on Goodreads
Kiki Sullivan is the brand new debut author of THE DOLLS, a fantastically creepy thriller that just came out in August. Although Kiki is a debut author, her knowledge and tips on writing rival any well established author.
The Craft of Outlining by Kiki Sullivan
In real life, I'm not always one for planning ahead. I like to see where the day will take me, what adventures will come my way.
But when it comes to the page, things are entirely different. Not only do I prefer to know where I'm going, but it's vital to me to be able to see the road to the end of each story I write before I write the first word of chapter one.
That's why I outline. Some writers swear by the technique. Others prefer to let their characters guide the story. I do a little of both; I outline very thoroughly, but I never stick to the blueprint entirely, because it's impossible to know before you begin writing exactly what your characters will do once you set them in motion. It's like having a roadmap, or a set of Mapquest directions, that show you exactly how to get to where you want to go. But once you're on the road, detouring off the main path a few times is always fine, as long as you eventually keep heading toward your destination.
In fact, sometimes it's the detours that make the journey so memorable.
So why outline? For me, there are several reasons. First, outlining makes writer's block virtually impossible. Sure, you'll still have unproductive writing sessions or days when your head's not in the game, but you'll never be defeated by your story because you'll always know where to go next.
Second, an outline is a way to try your story out before you begin writing the chapters. Why is this so important? It's simple; wouldn't you rather know you're going down the wrong path on page 20 of a 30-page outline instead of on page 200 of a 300-page book? Not only will you have spent far less time traveling down the wrong road, but it's also a whole lot easier to go back and tweak a plot thread in outline form. This saves you both time and wasted energy.
Third, an outline is a bit like a safety blanket. It gives you comfort on the hardest of days and keeps you safe and protected from your own self-doubt in a way. As long as you've found the way to the end of your outline, you can find your way to the end of your book too -- as long as you're willing to work hard.
Fourth, an outline helps you to summarize the story in your own mind. It sounds like an obvious point, but knowing exactly what your story is about -- in as few words as possible -- helps you to write it better. An outline helps crystallize your themes, your characters' goals, attributes and shortcomings, and the obstacles standing in their way. Being able to easily put a finger on these things lets you write your first draft much more efficiently.
So how do you outline? Different people do it different ways. Some prefer bulleted outlines. Some like to write scenes down on index cards so that they're easily rearrangeable (although I find that's handier in screenwriting, where scene placement tends to be a little more fluid). And some -- like me -- prefer to write outlines in an almost book report-like style. In other words, you're essentially writing a summary of your book before you even begin writing the book itself. Personally, I've always found that this helps the words and ideas to flow a little more freely, because you can also include dialogue, descriptions and other notes that bring the scene to life the moment they first appear in your head.
I wrote my first novel in 2003, and I did it using an outline technique that I taught myself -- and that has been my specialty since then. Here's how to get started:
First, choose a book that's similar in tone, length and style to the book you plan to write. It shouldn't be about the same topic -- for instance, if you're writing a vampire love story, don't choose Twilight -- but the target audience and genre should be the same. Now, sit down with that book and with either a notebook or your computer. Read chapter one. Now, summarize chapter one in one to three paragraphs, noting such things as when characters are introduced, how much background the author has included, how much dialogue is included, etc. Summarizing the story presented in that chapter should be your primary mission, but also keep an eye out for the writer's technique.
Now, do the same with chapter two. And chapter three. And so on, until you've reached the end of the book.
Now, you should have a solid outline of a single published book. Put it aside for a day, and then pick it back up again. Read it in one sitting. Here, condensed, is the framework for a book that works, a book that's been published, a book that's successful. You'll use this as a blueprint for writing your own outline.
Your scenes shouldn't follow the scenes of the model novel exactly. Simply use them as a guideline. Get a sense of the model author's flow. When does he or she introduce main characters? When do conflicts crop up? When are problems solved? How do the stakes get higher for the main character as the first half of the book progresses?
Now, sit down at your computer, open a new document and type, "CHAPTER ONE." Skip a few lines and begin your own outline. Take a look at the outline of the published book you've already developed. How did that author start his or her story with a bang? How are you introduced to the main character's world?
Essentially (and you'll find this advice on www.kikisullivan.com/writing-tips too), you'll want to begin with a scene that centers around your main character, gives us a chance to get to know her and her life situation, and gives us a good idea of her personality and lifestyle through dialogue, action and interaction. This scene should be fast-paced and take place before the main storyline of the book really kicks off, because you want the reader to be fully on board with your character and in her corner before anything very important happens. Follow that scene with a second scene, moving your main character to another location to show us a different aspect of her life. Bam – you have a chapter one.
Now, read chapter two in the outline you've produced for the already-published book. Use it as a rough model for your chapter two. And so on.
In general (this is also from www.kikisullivan.com/writing-tips):
• The beginning of your book should start with a bang and introduce us to your main character. By the end of chapter 1, the reader should feel drawn into the story. By the end of chapter 2, the reader should be fully on board with your main character. Don’t weigh the first and second chapters down with background. Only give us the essential parts of the backstory, and save the rest for later. We should arrive, relatively soon, at a dramatic plot twist that kicks off the main action of the book.
• The middle of the book will deal with a big challenge (and smaller associated challenges) your main character is facing and how she deals with them and learn something in the process. It should include a sort-of up and down pattern, where she solves some problems while trying to work through the main conflict, but she also runs into other problems along the way, many of which are of her own making or stem from the main issue at hand. The conflict should keep getting more complicated until the middle section of your book concludes in a climax that leads us to the end.
• The end of the book is where things get resolved and where the questions you’ve laid out throughout the book get answered. Your character should have grown and changed by now, as a result of what she’s gone through, and her responses to situations will show that change. This is your chance to conclude storylines and tie up loose plot threads. And remember, a satisfying ending doesn’t always have to include all the characters living happily ever after. But your main character, at least, should be better off at the end of the book than she is at the beginning, as a result of the way she has grown and changed throughout.
Hope this helps a bit. To some, outlining sounds tedious. To me, it's the most creative part of the writing process. It's your chance to begin getting to know your characters and to see them interacting with each other on the page. It's your chance to test out plotlines you're not entirely sure about. And it's an opportunity to see where your imagination takes you without having to take the time to make sure your words are pretty and perfect yet.
Good luck, and happy outlining!
About The Author
Kiki Sullivan is the author of The Dolls series. Like the main character Eveny Cheval, Kiki used to live in New York and now calls the American South home. Unlike Eveny, she finds it impossible to keep her rose garden alive and has been singlehandedly responsible for the unfortunate demise of countless herbs. She may or may not have hung out with queens of the dark arts, strolled through creepy New Orleans cemeteries at night, or written the first book of this series with a red-headed Louisiana voodoo doll beside her computer. Website
About The Book
Eveny Cheval just moved back to Louisiana after spending her childhood in New York with her aunt Bea. Eveny hasn’t seen her hometown since her mother’s suicide fourteen years ago, and her memories couldn’t have prepared her for what she encounters. Because pristine, perfectly manicured Carrefour has a dark side full of intrigue, betrayal, and lies—and Eveny quickly finds herself at the center of it all.
Enter Peregrine Marceau, Chloe St. Pierre, and their group of rich, sexy friends known as the Dolls. From sipping champagne at lunch to hooking up with the hottest boys, Peregrine and Chloe have everything—including an explanation for what’s going on in Carrefour. And Eveny doesn’t trust them one bit.
But after murder strikes and Eveny discovers that everything she believes about herself, her family, and her life is a lie, she must turn to the Dolls for answers. Something’s wrong in paradise, and it’s up to Eveny, Chloe, and Peregrine to save Carrefour and make it right.Amazon
Being book pregnant and having another in the over leaves you with little time to focus on learning new craft techniques. Or so I told myself.'
The truth was, I was cheating myself out of a wellspring of motivation and cheating my manuscript out of shortcuts to becoming a better manuscript. Are you doing the same thing? Telling yourself you have no time to focus
on writing because you're writing
On the surface, it sounds like a valid excuse. But when we break it down, there's no excuse not to read a blog post or two a day, or a chapter or even a few pages of a craft post. We can all find the few minutes it takes to do that. We should do that. The moment I went back to doing that, my creativity and productivity exploded.
Reading about craft:
- Activates our inner editor. Both on a conscious and subconscious level, we compare the techniques discussed to our work, which allows us to find solutions to problems we hadn't even identified yet.
- Forges new connections and primes the pump for new ideas. As we read, we are holding up our WIP as the test-case, and reading about generalities or reading examples from other work encourages our minds to find new possibilities in what we've written.
- Reminds us that the WIP is not the only Work-in-Progress. We are all still learning. But we don't learn without examining what we've done and comparing it to what others have done or are doing. Reading about craft stretches our minds and our skills.
- Reinvigorates the enthusiasm for the current project. Because our minds are more likely to see the good in our WIP as we begin to compare and examine it, we have the opportunity to fall in love again and remember why we fell in love with the story and the characters. We start to look forward to working on the WIP instead of regarding it as a chore.
So what are you waiting for? Run, don't walk, to dig out your favorite craft book for fifteen minutes a day, or find some great articles or blog posts and at least skim through them. Take a few moments to think about how you write in general.
Where can you find such blog posts or articles, you ask? Remember way back when I used to do a big round-up every Friday with all the best offerings I'd found that week? Then Google decided to eliminate Google Reader, and it became too time consuming to do that.
But . . .
Now I've found a way to hook Mr. Reader to Google+ via Bufferapp!
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What About You?
How much time do you spend reading about craft? Reading in your genre?
I met Cheryl Rainfield through the Toronto Area Middle Grade/YA Author Group (also known as Torkidlit) and am a big fan of her work (especially SCARS and HUNTED in the past). A survivor of abuse, Cheryl often draws upon her own experience in her intense and highly charged fiction. I love Cheryl's enthusiasm for kidlit/YA as well as her positive outlook and support of others in the community.
STAINED was named one of Bank Street College's Best Books Of The Year (2014) for ages 14 and up, and was a SCBWI Crystal Kite Finalist.
For those in the Toronto area: Cheryl will be speaking about STAINED and signing copies (as well as of SCARS and HUNTED) at Chapters Scarborough at 2 pm on Saturday, Sept. 13th, 2014.
Where you can find Cheryl Rainfield: Website - Blog - Twitter - Facebook Personal/Pro - Tumblr - Instagram - Pinterest
Q. What’s your writing process? Or What was your writing process for STAINED?
A. I write and edit my manuscripts by hand. Longhand writing feels more connected to my inner voice, my creativity, and more alive. And then I type the writing into MS Word. At various points, I also send out my manuscript to other writers to get feedback, and then I revise again. For STAINED, I did about thirteen drafts before it sold to Houghton Mifflin Harcourt, and then multiple drafts before it was published. At one point my editor Karen Grove asked me to try writing some scenes from the abductor’s point of view. I tried, but I think because what I wrote about was so personal—I was drawing on my own trauma and abuse experience—and because I can’t bear to be in the head of an abuser, especially an abuser character based on my own abuser—I found it painful and I struggled writing those scenes. Ultimately I took those scenes out; the book worked better, the way I could write it, with just Sarah and Nick’s alternating viewpoints.
STAINED was the first book I’ve written where I used two different perspectives, and I really enjoyed the process. I put a lot of myself into both Sarah and Nick. I think the alternate points of view helped fill in the gaps in Sarah’s story that she couldn’t know about from her perspective, gave the reader a small breather, and sometimes worked to increase the tension. I also used them to gradually develop the relationship between Sarah and Nick, and the awareness that they really loved each other.
I typically write a lot of drafts quickly, always trying to make the writing and story better, stronger, more powerful, and often doing drafts focused on different things each time. In early drafts, I tend to write the conflicts and tension, the emotion in the characters, the action and plot, and tend to leave out description and setting—I think because as a person and an abuse survivor that’s what I notice most in the world: tension, body language, emotion. So then I have to go back in and layer those things in, as well as symbols and metaphors if I’ve left them out.
I also usually have to go back in and intentionally add lightness and breathing room for the reader. I'm so used to tension and fear and and pain—it's what I lived most of my life and know inside out—that putting in happier moments has to be very intentional on my part. I also think tension and conflict helps make a book a page turner—but readers need breathing room, too. I had a lot of fun giving Sarah and Nick a love of comics and superheroes in STAINED, since I also love and read them, and I also enjoyed making Nick draw (I do, too), giving him geeky technological savviness (also my love), and giving Sarah the strength and courage to stand up to bullies who were harassing other kids (also part of myself). And I managed, probably for my first book ever, to give my main character two really good parents--something that comes from my finally having some loving, safe people in my life, and especially my therapist. I think I'm getting better at adding in lightness in my early drafts.
I used to be a pantser writer, not wanting to feel confined by outlines, but I now do outlines with the knowledge that I can change them—and they help me write a lot better, faster. With every book I write, I use THE ANATOMY OF STORY by John Truby to help guide my initial focus, character and plot building, and outline, and also at least my first draft. I’ve found that book incredibly helpful and valuable, as well as a lecture I attended by Donald Maass where I learned a lot more about symbols, parallels, and reversals, which I also add in. And I always, always get feedback from other writers and polish my work before sending it on to my agent. I want my writing to be as polished as it can be before I submit it, so that it’s more likely to get published.
Q. How did STAINED get published?
A. My agent at the time—Andrea Somberg at Harvey Klinger—submitted my manuscript to editors and found a home for STAINED at Houghton Mifflin Harcourt. This was a relief to me, since WestSide, the publisher who’d published SCARS and HUNTED, had closed just before HUNTED came out, and I needed a new, stable, and good publishing home. Houghton Mifflin Harcourt has been fantastic with me and STAINED, releasing STAINED in the US, Canada, and the UK, in print, ebook, and audiobook formats. It’ll also be coming out in a cheaper paperback format mid-2015; I’m excited about that!
I think having a good agent vastly improves a writer’s chances of getting a manuscript published; an agent can submit work to publishers who are closed to writers without agents, and that includes most of the big publishing houses. Although you can get published without an agent, it’s a lot harder. I also learned when I attended college for an editing certificate that publishers generally have two standard contracts—one for authors without an agent, and one for authors with an agent. And the contract for authors with an agent automatically starts at higher royalty rates and better clauses and options. And a good agent knows editors personally and can figure out what manuscript to place with what editor, and also help guide a writer’s career. So I knew I needed an agent.
I actually got my first contract by myself—through the slushpile with WestSide Books—but after years of research, reading writing technique books, publishing industry books, and articles, I knew I needed an agent to negotiate the contract for me, and to help advance my career. I’d initially queried Andrea with HUNTED, which she’d rejected, but her rejection letter was one of the nicest and longest I’d received, and she mentioned hoping to work with me on another book. Her letter stood out to me. So when I got an offer for SCARS (two offers, actually, almost at the same time), I contacted her and asked if she’d represent me, and she did. She also sold HUNTED, and of course STAINED, and I’m grateful for all her help.
Traditional publishing can be slow. I signed the final contract for STAINED in February 2012; I think we got the offer in late 2011, worked on the edits in 2012 (and waited for feedback in between), and then STAINED was published in October 2013. But there’s so much that goes into producing a book—not just the content editing, but also copyediting, proofreading, cover design, interior design and layout, jacket copy, and then also promotion and distribution.
I love what Houghton Mifflin Harcourt did with STAINED—the designer did an incredible, tasteful job with the final cover, pulling a rich, deep purple into the title (because Sarah has a purpleish port-wine stain on her cheek that she obsesses about) and also into the endpapers, and black vertical streaks reminiscent of the cabin Sarah was locked in; the gorgeous texture to the matte jacket; featuring the tagline on the cover: “Sometimes you have to be your own hero;” picking a worn, broken-looking font for the chapter heads with the name and time stamps and initial first words in the first paragraph; using nicely textured cream paper; the readable typeset; and the tiny visual surprise on the hardcover along the spine beneath the book jacket—the title, my name, and publisher info in a gorgeous iridescent purple. I love how a book looks, as you may be able to tell (laughing) so it was a delight to have such care taken with STAINED. Holding a finished book that you wrote for the first time is such a joy.
Q. What advice do you have for aspiring YA writers?
A. First—if your dream is to get published, don’t give up.
You may face a lot of rejection over time, but if you persist I think you’ll eventually get published. It took me more than ten years and hundreds of rejections from both editors and agents before I got SCARS published. If I’d given up before then—and in the last few years I was very despairing—then I might never have been published.
Edit your work over and over until it sounds right. One trick I use for some drafts is to read my manuscript aloud. I can hear what works and what doesn’t better that way. It also helps to put your manuscript away for at least a week (I often do two to even four weeks) between drafts before editing again, so that you have as clear a read as possible and can see what’s really working and what really isn’t.
Make sure to get honest feedback from other writers; that can help you advance so much as a writer. Don’t change everything based on what others say, though; make sure to listen to your gut, and to change what feels right. Let the manuscript and feedback sit for a week or more before acting on it unless you’re absolutely sure. I found that joining a critique group of other writers who wrote in the same genre I did helped me immensely; I not only got great feedback, but I also got to hear what worked and what didn’t in others’ writing, and learn from that.
Learn the craft of writing—attend conferences and professional talks, read articles online such as K.M. Weiland’s Helping Writers Become Authors and in magazines such as Writer’s Digest, and most especially read books on writing technique (if you can learn that way) or take some classes.
Writing technique books have really helped me; I’ve read (and bought) more than a hundred books on technique, and I go back and reread some of them and glean new things as I progress as a writer.
If you can't afford to buy them, don't forget about your library! I list a lot of writing technique books I recommend on my blog and website. Two of the most helpful books I read when starting out are Self-Editing For Fiction Writers: How To Edit Yourself Into Print by Renni Brown and Dave King, and Live Writing: Breathing Life Into Your Words by Ralph Fletcher. Later, when I’d learned a lot more about writing technique, some books that really helped me a lot are Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, and Bestseller: Secrets of Successful Writing by Celia Brayfield. And right now, my top three current favorites are The Anatomy of Story: 22 Steps To Becoming a Master Storyteller by John Truby, Stein On Writing: A Master Editor of Some of the Most Successful Writers of Our Time Shares His Craft Techniques and Secrets by Sol Stein, and Wired For Story: The Writer’s Guide To Using Brain Science To Hook Readers From The Very First Sentence by Lisa Cron. I also highly recommend The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer’s Guide To Character Expression by Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi.
Learn from them, take what works for you, and discard the rest.
Read. Read as much as you can—for pleasure and for craft. Read in the genre you write in (and hopefully love to read); you’ll learn from it, and you’ll also fill your own creative well. And write about what you care deeply about. Your readers will sense your passion and respond to it.
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When I especially enjoy reading a book or fall in love with a particular illustration, it’s usually because the author or illustrator manages to convey an emotion, scene or story in an unusual way, that spurs me to look at the world a little differently.
I try to remember this when writing and illustrating. It's one of my goals when I create found object art, trying to avoid the obvious.
Creating a character readers with whom readers connect is tricky. It takes more than creating a heroic or sexy character. It takes more than creating a well-rounded character with quirks and flaws. There are plenty of deep, fascinating characters with whom readers don't connect. Just as we take an instinctive like or dislike to real people, we also engage more with certain protagonists on the page.
What is it that makes a character likable? Some of the common denominators in likable characters include making sure that she (or he):
- has something she loves.
- has something she fights for.
- is willing to sacrifice for something.
- has some special skill or ability.
- has some handicap or hardship that makes her an underdog.
- has a flaw that readers can relate to and forgive.
- operates from motivation the readers can see and understand.
- has wit, spunk, or a sense of humor.
But that's not the end of the story. Just sprinkling one or two of the above items into a story can make the plot and character feel cardboard and a bit cliche. Most of those "fixes" have been used so often they've led to a whole class of character called a Mary Sue, a figure so romanticized or perfect he or she doesn't come across as believable. Here, by the way, is THE definitive quiz on Mary Sues:http://www.unc.edu/~jemarti/marysuetest/
But okay, say a character isn't a Mary Sue. Say she (or he) has one or more of the traits that should make her likeable. She's flawed and complex, and better yet, her flaws and strengths directly drive the plot and make the outcome of the story unpredictable. But still the 'unlikeable' word rears it's ugly head.
Time for tougher questions.
Especially when it comes to the strong female protagonist that so many of us are trying to do justice to lately, how tough is too tough? How much vulnerability do we need to show? How much emotion does a character need to express, and how often? How many hard, confusing, or unlikeable decisions can she make?
As a point of discussion, let's take Katniss Everdeen. There is no question that the whole HUNGER GAMES trilogy is beyond successful, and Katniss is an unforgetable character. But she is one of the recent characters I've seen most often described as "unlikeable." Do you agree? Disagree?
THE HUNGER GAMES is dark and the books get progressively darker. It's tough to be inside that world, and even tougher to be inside Katniss's head. I know for me, I fell in love with Katniss when I saw her willingness to sacrifice for Prim, and she had me hooked with her tenderness to Rue. Her concern for Rue's family, too, made me love her, as did her self-doubt, her willingness to acknowledge and dislike her own questionable motives. I believed in Katniss, hook, line and bow string. In CATCHING FIRE, Katniss was just as real. But Prim was stronger. There was no Rue character. Her situation was much harder, more ambiguous. She was tougher. Did that make her less likeable? I've certainly read that people believe that was the case. What about her depression in MOCKINGJAY? Was that too much?
And here's a better question. Would we be having the same conversation about likeability if Katniss had been a male protagonist?
At the NoVA Teen Book Festival this year, Meagan Spooner mentioned that she got all kinds of hate mail about Lilac, the main female character in THESE BROKEN STARS. That book is wonderful. And Lilac is a terrific character with a huge character ARC. She begins as a spoiled and bitchy rich girl--but even in the darkest early moments of bitchiness, Meagan and her co-author, Amie Kaufman, were careful to lay the foundations that let readers see that there was more going on than met the eye. That was one of the the things that drew me into the book so quickly. Why was Lilac behaving the way she was toward Tarver? Why was she making
herself behave that way toward him? Finding out kept me turning pages until I discovered the reason, and by that time, Lilac had already started her transformation into a character I could
I can't help wondering if there would have been any complaints at all if the shoe had been on the other foot. Had Tarver been the pampered, beautiful playboy and Lilac the intelligent and hardworking hero, would there have been any hate mail at all? I kind of doubt it, given that that's the cast of the majority of commercial fiction.
I'd love to hear your thoughts. Have you read THESE BROKEN STARS and THE HUNGER GAMES? Would character likeability have been a question at all if the genders of Lilac and Katniss had been reversed?
Katrina Leno is the debut author of The Half Life of Molly Pierce, which hit the shelves on July 8th! We are super excited to have her on the blog today sharing with us some of her experiences on her road to becoming a published author!
How To Write When You Really, Really Don't Want To by Katrina Leno
Let me first say: I love writing.
I love when I want to write. I love when it’s easy. I love when the words pour out from the tips of my fingers and onto the proverbial blank notebook page or Word document.
Writing is great! Writing makes me feel normal. I push all the weird thoughts, all the non-PC thoughts, all the scary or different or offbeat thoughts out of me and then I feel centered. I feel peaceful, even. I feel like the best possible version of myself.
I’m my best when I am writing.
Except when I’m not.
Except when it isn’t easy and it isn’t fun and it isn’t so much like a gift but a curse, one handed down to you from an evil witch with no regard for your well-being or sanity or long-forgotten desire to have a social life.
Like today, coincidentally.
Today, writing sucked.
Today, every word was pulled from the depths of the stickiest, murkiest swamp. Like—the swamp where Artax dies. Like I literally got down on my hands and knees and bare-handedly pulled words up from the mud of this swamp, hoping beyond hope I would not pull up any horse bones with them.
So what do you do when writing sucks? What do you do when you really, really don’t want to write? How do you still feel productive or happy with yourself when every single word you put down is forced or cliché or—ugh, like today—boring?
I’m sure everyone who has ever studied writing or read a book about writing or talked to people about writing has come across this idea that you must write EVERY DAY in order to be a writer. I’ve blogged about this before and yeah, sure, it’s mostly right (except when it isn’t) but let’s just put that aside for now and assume that, even though you don’t WANT to write, you have to write. Or, you don’t want to write but you WANT to write (that’s a thing). Or, you don’t want to write, but you don’t want to go to bed without writing.
That was me all day today.
It came after two 5k-word days, so I wasn’t particularly hard on myself. But still, I’d set a goal for myself and it was clear I wasn’t going to make my goal. And that was irritating. So I decided to make at least half my goal. And then I decided to write this, a little list for what I do when things aren’t working. Sometimes the things on this list work for me. And sometimes they don’t. Because the funny, annoying, great thing about writing is that it is always, always different. Have you ever heard that OTHER saying, you don’t learn how to write novels, you learn how to write the novel you’re writing? Yup. That is the truest of the true. So take the following with a grain of salt. Try things out. Scrap the things that don’t work. Keep coming back to the things that do work. Push yourself to write when you don’t want to write. You may be surprised with what comes out of your brain when you least expect it.
—Find something you don’t want to do. And then find something you do want to do. And then do each, right after another. Today, I cleaned the bathroom. And then I watched one episode of AMERICAN HORROR STORY. And then, having exhausted my options, I started to write.
—Shut off your internet if you don’t have the self-control to not go on your internet. Don’t worry. Your internet will be there when you need it again. But, while you write, you definitely don’t need to also be frantically refreshing your Twitter account. Your mentions can wait. Your blog can wait. Your online identity can wait.
—Set a timer. Keep your phone in another room, but set the timer for fifteen or twenty minutes. Do a half an hour if you’re feeling brave, an hour if you’re feeling REALLY brave. You are going to write for this amount of time, or you are going to stare at your blank computer screen while the minutes tick by.
—Establish a routine. Always write in this one particular corner/chair/café. NEVER GO THERE WHEN YOU’RE NOT WRITING. Train your brain to connect that spot to productivity and words. BUT—also write in other places. Don’t box yourself into a corner with your routine. Routines are GOOD but they also (I strongly believe!) need to be shake up every once in a while.
—Read a chapter of your favorite book. You know, the book that always inspires you, that always reminds you of why you wanted to be a writer in the first place, the book that makes you feel like you’ve been picked up out of your bedroom and deposited in another world, another life. Read a chapter of that book. Then write.
—Write badly! On purpose. Bad writing has its merits, too. You can always edit later.
—Write from a prompt. Almost without fail, this helps me get out of whatever slump I’m in. You can look up prompts online, you can buy a book of prompts, you can even text your friends bizarre questions and see what they write back and take it from there. Not everybody likes writing prompts, and I get that. But they definitely have their place and their purpose.
—Freewrite. This is a huge one for me. HUGE. I came up with the premise for one of my novels by setting an alarm for fifteen minutes, putting pen to paper, and not letting that pen leave the paper until the alarm sounded. Let me just tell you, though: freewriting takes A LOT of practice. You won’t be immediately good at it. It will take weeks. It is a learned skill. But once you reach that zen-like place where the words are spilling out of you more quickly than you can even think them (or spell them correctly), you will understand how important a good freewriting session is.
Voila! You’re writing now, right?
If no—that’s okay. The important thing is that you want to write. The important thing is that you keep trying.
Writing is hard. Some days it will be easier. Some days it will be harder. Sometimes it will occupy this fuzzy, grey area. Some days it will be swamp. Some days it will be rainbows and magic and butterflies.
Keep pushing yourself. Figure out what works for you. Jump in.
About The Author
Katrina Leno is a writer from the East Coast, who is currently living in Los Angeles.Website
About The Book
You take it for granted. Waking up. Going to school, talking to your friends. Watching a show on television or reading a book or going out to lunch.
You take for granted going to sleep at night, getting up the next day, and remembering everything that happened to you before you closed your eyes.
You live and you remember.
Me, I live and I forget.
But now—now I am remembering.
For all of her seventeen years, Molly feels like she’s missed bits and pieces of her life. Now, she’s figuring out why. Now, she’s remembering her own secrets. And in doing so, Molly uncovers the separate life she seems to have led…and the love that she can’t let go.
The Half Life of Molly Pierce is a suspenseful, evocative psychological mystery about uncovering the secrets of our pasts, facing the unknowns of our futures, and accepting our whole selves.Amazon
We know we're supposed to show and not tell. As beginning writers, we hurl this advice at each other in critique groups and workshops with self-satisfied little smirks, happy to have learned something, anything, to help us improve our manuscripts. Rules are good, right? They give us structure in this magical world of fiction that inherently stretches the boundaries of our imagination.
|Beethoven’s Trumpet (With Ear) By John Baldessari, at the Saatchi Gallery.Photo by Jim Linwood, on Flickr, CC-BY|
But sometimes we use these rules as crutches, and rely on them until we forget the joy of walking on our own two feet.
Sometimes, we forget that writing is about saying something only we can express.
Sometimes, we edit the joy and individuality and voice
out of our manuscripts. We play it safe.
What is voice? Like pornography, we know it when we see it, but it's hard to define. And it's different for every writer and every book. Often it's easier to recognize when voice is missing than to identify what makes it unique when it is there. No matter how great the plot, how skillfully the writer shows
us the action unfolding and the emotion being experienced, if a novel could have been written by anyone, do we love it as much as those books in which the voice speaks clearly enough to be remembered?
Look at the following examples:
When the doorbell rings at three in the morning, it's never good news. (Anthony Horowitz, Stormbreaker)
Long ago, on the wild and windy isle of Berk, a smallish Viking with a longish name stood up to his ankles in snow. (Cressida Cowell, How to Train Your Dragon)
One afternoon, when Bruno came home from school, he was surprised to find Maria, the family’s maid — who always kept her head bowed and never looked up from the carpet — standing in his bedroom, pulling all his belongings out of the wardrobe and packing them in four large wooden crates, even the things he’d hidden at the back that belonged to him and were nobody else’s business. (John Boyne, The Boy in the Stripped Pajamas)
The best day of my life happened when I was five and almost died at Disney World. (Libba Bray, Going Bovine)
I'm dreaming of the boy in the tree and at the exact moment I'm about to hear the answer I've been waiting for, the flashlights yank me out of what could have been one of those moments of perfect clarity people talk about for the rest of their lives. (Melina Marchetta, Jellicoe Road)
You can hear the voice in every one of those opening sentences. The authora aren't showing us action; they are telling us something only they or the characters could know.
For me, voice is telling. To be true and genuine, voice has to take us by the hand and lead us into the magical world of the character, or the narrator. But beyond the facts or emotion that the words convey, voice is about the selection of the words themselves. It's that indefinable quality of rhythm and sentence structure and elegance of expression that elevates writing above the ordinary.
Not every book has that kind of voice. The great ones do. As Truman Capote put it, "the greatest pleasure of writing is not what it's about, but the music the words make." Michener, on the other hand, defined voice more broadly as "the swirl and swing of words as they tangle with human emotions."
According to Patricia Lee Gauch, voice comes from within the writer. "A writer's voice like the stroke of an artists brush-is the thumbprint of her whole person-her idea, wit, humor, passions, rhythms."
Do you have a favorite author whose voice you love? Or an example of voice from your own work? How do you define the indefinable?
Note: This is a repost. We're on limited hiatus through the end of July, with a mix of reprise and new posts coming all month.
I turned in my draft of the sequel to Compulsion a couple of weeks ago, and we finally have a name for the book.
Are you ready?
What do you think? I loooooove it.
And I have an AMAZINGLY gorgeous cover design by the fabulous Regina Flath. I think it's even better than Compulsion's cover, and I can't wait to share it with you.
While I'm waiting for my editorial letter from my lovely editor, Sara Sargent, I'm going through the manuscript and making notes for myself. Most of that involves checking to make sure I've done everything I can structure-wise, because we're not at the stage of worrying about words quite yet.
For me, thinking about structure begins with character. I'm asking myself some tough questions, and I thought I'd share them with you as an info graphic:
CHARACTER CHECKLIST INFOGRAPHIC
Hexedby Michelle KrysHardcoverDelacorte PressReleased 6/10/2014
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If high school is all about social status, Indigo Blackwood has it made. Sure, her quirky mom owns an occult shop, and a nerd just won’t stop trying to be her friend, but Indie is a popular cheerleader with a football-star boyfriend and a social circle powerful enough to ruin everyone at school. Who wouldn’t want to be her?
Then a guy dies right before her eyes. And the dusty old family Bible her mom is freakishly possessive of is stolen. But it’s when a frustratingly sexy stranger named Bishop enters Indie’s world that she learns her destiny involves a lot more than pom-poms and parties. If she doesn’t get the Bible back, every witch on the planet will die. And that’s seriously bad news for Indie, because according to Bishop, she’s a witch too.
Suddenly forced into a centuries-old war between witches and sorcerers, Indie’s about to uncover the many dark truths about her life—and a future unlike any she ever imagined on top of the cheer pyramid.
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Today, I’d like to make an introduction. Friends, meet the brand-new COMPULSION microsite. Do you love it like I do? Like the cover, it’s atmospheric, magical, and a bit surreal, not your usual Southern Gothic, but still subtly so.
COMPULSION, on the other hand, is not subtly Southern Gothic. I went
there. I embraced my favorite over-the-top Southern Gothic elements and then I twisted them. So what makes a Southern Gothic?
Well, the famed Southern author Pat Conroy, who I’m suddenly reminded once offered to read back when it never occurred to me that I would ever write a Southern book, provided my favorite definition of the genre. “My mother, Southern to the bone,” he said in a speech to the American Booksellers Association, “once told me, “All Southern literature can be summed up in these words: On the night the hogs ate Willie, Mama died when she heard what Daddy did to Sister.”
Got all that? :) That definition gives you almost all the elements: setting, eccentric characters, grotesquerie, and a voice that seeks a bit of light amid the darkness.
Let’s break it down a little more. The elements of a Southern Gothic include:A Southern setting that becomes a character in the book.
That takes more than looming cypress trees hung with Spanish moss, decaying mansions, and seemingly friendly neighbors who aren’t what they seem. A great setting in any book has to show us somewhere new and unique, or something familiar from a fresh perspective. That place must contain specific values and characteristics that impact the people who live there and change them for better or for worse. Most importantly, the setting in a Southern Gothic creates the plot by forcing change upon the characters. Deeply flawed, damaged, bigger-than-life characters with a heaping dose of crazy.
The purpose of these characters isn’t simply to create sympathy for the innocent heroine who has to live with their misdeeds. Nor is it just because nearly every Southern family has a crazy uncle Bobby Joe in the woodpile or the county jail. These characters are broken, and for the most part, they’re finding their way through their lives and navigating among the people around them as best they can. Their flaws and poor choices serve to highlight questions of morality, gender roles, inequality, corruption, violence, racism, poverty versus wealth, and other weaknesses in society.An innocent plunged into the mix
. Because the genre derives from the pure gothic genre, there is usually an innocent: a young woman, young man, child, or outsider who serves to examine, heal, and redeem.Powerful family histories, traditions, myths, folklore, and magic that serve up unique, supernatural, or ironic events.
These derive from the setting and the deeply torn history of the South itself, the push and pull of pride and shame, of love for the past and the need to escape it. This in turn created the characters, which in turn feeds the process of change. Narrative choices that add humor, lightness, or irony to play against the darkness.
I went with swoony romance and a dramatic style, and I love the freedom within this genre that lets me play with extremes. But the range of options writers choose for this element of the Southern Gothic is among the widest. You get gorgeous writing, or very sparse prose. There's the tongue-in-cheek narrator, or one with a subtle hint of humor. There's the gamut from Poe, to Faulkner, to Conroy, to Eudora Welty.
I love that a wealth of Southern Gothic tradition is developing in young adult literature. And just as young adult authors have stretched the boundaries with every other genre, there are many different flavors of Southern Gothic evolving.
, I lean toward a star-crossed romance with a mix of magical realism and outright fantasy. Maggie Stiefvater expertly blended Southern Gothic elements with Welsh mythology and romanticism to create a complex examination of friendship, wealth, and poverty. Kami Garcia and Margaret Stohl build an elaborate paranormal world and a memorable romance in their BEAUTIFUL CREATURES
series. Melissa Marr created a heart-pounding Southern Gothic thriller in her upcoming MADE FOR YOU, and Delilah S. Dawson and Natalie S. Parker are leaning toward chilling horror in SERVANTS OF THE STORM and BEWARE THE WILD.
It’s a fabulous fall y’all. Are you looking forward to heading down South?
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Here's the thing about writing horror: it's all about the set up.
We're all scared of different things.
For some people, the idea of a giant spider lurking under the bed, is enough to paralyze them with fear. For others, it's the idea of being buried alive in a close, black coffin, utterly sightless in the dark. Still others fear the darkness. Or heights. Or being abandoned in the middle of nowhere.
So many different kinds of scary. The things we fear most come in a variety of shapes and sizes, from the physical – like spiders and sharks – to the esoteric – like claustrophobia and paranoia – to the otherworldly – like demons and vampires and witches (oh my!). What scares one person might be unicorns and rainbows to someone else. But set up properly, even unicorns and rainbows can scare the crap out of you.
To me, conveying fear isn't just about describing a situation, object, or person that someone might find scary, but giving a blow-by-blow of the event and actually detailing the fear reaction in the characters.
We all know exactly what it feels like to be scared. First you have the anticipation: What's behind that closed door? What's making that scratching noise in the attic? What's lurking in the deep, dark waters? It's the tensing of muscles like you're expecting a blow, that stretching of all your senses, trying to see/feel/hear/smell danger before it pounces on you. The higher the tension is pitched, the bigger the wallop.
Next, the reveal. The door opens to expose a dead body that spills out on top of our poor heroine the moment she turns the doorknob. The scratching noise in the attic inexplicably moves through the ceiling, down the stairs and manifests in a dark, demonic entity. The dorsal fin of a great white shark breaks the surface of the water in which you're swimming. The terror has been revealed in one jarring, scream-inducing moment!
But that's not scary enough, not for the expectant reader. You need the next step in the process – experiencing the fear through the eyes of the main character. We need to feel their bodies tremble as they break out into a cold sweat. We need to hear the blood-curdling scream that explodes from their mouths. We need to internalize the sick, sinking feeling in their stomachs as death closes in around them.
And lastly, the action. Our heroine's panicked flee from the house, our hero's desperate attempt to out maneuver a man-eating shark. Will they survive? Will they escape? Hearts pound in anticipation with every turn of the page!!!!
Broken down, none of these steps in the process seems particularly scream-worthy, but strung together with pacing and tension? WHAM. Horror show.
* * * About the Author
Gretchen McNeil's YA horror POSSESS about a teen exorcist debuted with Balzer + Bray for HarperCollins in 2011. Her follow up TEN – YA horror/suspense about ten teens trapped on a remote island with a serial killer – was a 2013 YALSA Top Ten Quick Pick for Reluctant Young Adult Readers, a Romantic Times Top Pick, a Booklist Top Ten Horror Fiction for Youth, and was nominated for "Best Young Adult Contemporary Novel of 2012" by Romantic Times. Gretchen's 2013 release is 3:59, a sci-fi doppelganger horror about two girls who are the same girl in parallel dimensions who decide to switch places.
In 2014, Gretchen debuts her first series, Don't Get Mad (pitched as "John Hughes with a body count") about four very different girls who form a secret society where they get revenge on bullies and mean girls at their elite prep school. The Don't Get Mad series begins Fall 2014 with GET EVEN, followed by the sequel GET DIRTY in 2015, also with Balzer + Bray. Gretchen also contributed an essay to the Dear Teen Me anthology from Zest Books.
Gretchen is a former coloratura soprano, the voice of Mary on G4's Code Monkeys and she sings with the LA-based circus troupe Cirque Berzerk. In her spare time, she blogs with The Enchanted Inkpot and she was a founding member of the vlog group the YARebels.
Gretchen is repped by the incomparable Ginger Clark of Curtis Brown, Ltd.Website
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Follows the secretive exploits of four high school juniors - Kitty, Olivia, Margot and Bree - at an exclusive Catholic prep school.
To all outward appearances, the girls barely know each other. At best, they don't move in the same social circles; at worst, they're overtly hostile.
Margot Mejia – academically ranked number two in her class, Margot is a focused overachiever bound for the Ivy League.
Kitty Wei – captain of the California state and national champion varsity girls' volleyball team, she's been recruited by a dozen colleges and has dreams of winning an Olympic gold medal.
Olivia Hayes – popular star of the drama program, she's been voted "most eligible bachelorette" two years running in the high school yearbook and has an almost lethal combination of beauty and charm.
Bree Deringer – outcast, misfit and the kind of girl you don't want to meet in a dark alley, the stop sign red-haired punk is a constant thorn in the side of teachers and school administrators alike.
Different goals, different friends, different lives, but the girls share a secret no one would ever guess. They are members of Don't Get Mad, a society specializing in seeking revenge for fellow students who have been silently victimized by their peers. Each girl has her own reason for joining the group, her own set of demons to assuage by evening the score for someone else. And though school administration is desperate to find out who is behind the DGM "events", the girls have managed to keep their secret well hidden.
That is until one of their targets – a douchebag senior who took advantage of a drunk underclassman during a house party, videotaped it on his phone, and posted it on YouTube – turns up dead, and DGM is implicated in the murder.
Now the girls don't know who to trust, and as their tenuous alliance begins to crumble, the secrets they've hidden for so long might be their ultimate undoing.Preorder Get Even on AmazonFind Get Even on Goodreads** Please note: This is an updated repost. AYAP is on limited hiatus until August, with a mixture of old favorites, new posts, and new giveaways.
Jen Longo makes her YA debut this month with SIX FEET OVER IT, a story about a fourteen year old girl who works in her family run cemetery and funeral home. The book is said to be incredibly funny but deeply moving as well. As a debut author, Jen's post is brilliantly insightful.
A Diatribe on Dialogue by Jennifer Longo“Words don’t deserve that kind of malarkey. They’re innocent, neutral, precise, standing for this, describing that, meaning the other, so if you look after them you can build bridges across incomprehension and chaos. But when they get their corners knocked off, they’re no good anymore…I don’t think writers are sacred, but words are. They deserve respect. If you get the right ones in the right order, you can nudge the world a little.”
That’s a bit of Tom Stoppard from his beautiful play The Real Thing, a script about a playwright name Henri who is much like Stoppard himself. Here, he is being cranky about some terrible dialogue written by a lazy pretend-writer. My own education and background as a writer is in Playwriting which, when you get down to it, is essentially story telling primarily through dialogue. Well, and stage directions, but unless you’re Shaw or Shakespeare some theatre directors tend to get their back up when the writer tries to “Boss me around, don’t tell me to tell anyone to cross left behind the sofa! I’m not your puppet!”
But to the point – Dialogue. I don’t know about you, but as a reader and now a first-time novelist, I can forgive a lot of things if the dialogue is good, whereas books (and films) can get yelled at and abandoned when I hate the dialogue. Which sounds super judge-y, and yes taste is subjective but I think we all know there are times when dialogue has made us absolutely cringe. Especially when we’ve written it ourselves. *Slinks sheepishly away* And the thing is, it’s not that hard to write effective, beautiful, active dialogue. People, trust me. We can work together and figure it out. We can listen to our editors, get readers we trust, (No real friend would have let George Lucas get away with “Hold me, Like you did by the lake on Naboo.” My God. No actor could have worked with that. No one
Plus, remember our readers are our actors, and obviously not everyone is Laurence Olivier, so we must give dialogue that even we regular people can hear in our heads in a real way, the way the writer intends. It must be evident, not left to chance.
One of the biggest roadblocks I struggle with – and really, I think most writers do – is Ye Olde exposition. Good lord, what a mess it can make of perfectly crafted conversation. I actually remember the first time terrible exposition-laden dialogue turned me from a regular person into a twelve-year-old dialogue snob, and it wasn’t a book. In the mid 80’s there was this show on T.V. called first, I think, Valerie. It was about Valerie Harper and her family, her oldest son was played by Jason Bateman. Somewhere in the second season there were contract negotiation problems and Valerie was killed off, Sandy Duncan and her glass eye came in to be the Aunt and take over the family, and the show was re-named Valerie’s Family. Snap. So, the first episode without Valerie, Jason Bateman is walking among the crumbling ruins of the family house which has clearly burned down, and he finds a photograph of Valerie (ooh, double snap!) and he says, “Remember when mom died in that car crash?” and then he huddles over the frame and starts sobbing. My youthful sensibilities were rattled to the core, absolutely stunned that such a stupid, clunky line could make it’s way onto a show as masterful and socially relevant as Valerie’s Family. Which later was called, simply, The Hogans, and then it got cancelled. Probably for having such horrible dialogue.
But then not long after, I begged my mom to drive me to the Placerville Cinema 4 again and again so I could pay to see Terms Of Endearment a dozen times. I could not get enough of that thing. Oh God, Debra Winger grabbing her errant son’s face from her death bed to tell him, “Tommy be sweet. Be sweet.” Ahrghgh! All the times they didn’t speak, right when they shouldn’t. Perfect. No big goodbye, no big last speech of wisdom, none of that – just “Be sweet.”
The thing I think is so delicious about writing books is that we’ve got the luxury of being in character’s heads, we can write all the Stage Directions we want, because we are in charge. Playwriting is like being an architect, the play is the blueprint and the director is the general contractor actually bringing the thing to life. As authors, we get to be everyone – and must be. It’s a great responsibility to carefully choose what our characters will say, and maybe even more importantly, what they don’t say
. I love, love as a reader, being trusted and not having things spelled out. When someone responds not with words, but with pointed action, that is so often the best. I absolutely die every time I read the Half Blood Prince scene (Spoiler Alert! Wait. Screw that. If this spoils anything for you you’re living in a cave and you won’t be reading a craft blog post anyway.) right after the Gryffindors win the Quidditch Cup, and Ginny’s just staring at him, and he at her, and Ron’s face is all, “Whatev!” and none of them says anything but then They Kiss. Love. It. (Harry and Ginny, not Harry and Ron. That’s a different book.)
In E. Lockhart’s We Were Liars
The most beautiful dialogue mirrors of the mystery of the unfolding story, so simply, not at all heavy handed, and in only a few lines: He picks a second peony and hands it to me. “For forgiveness, my dear.” I pat him on his hunched back. “Don’t pick any more, okay?”…. “Three flowers for you. You should have three.” He looks pitiful. He looks powerful.
Kills me. You get there’s something he knows, and wants to tell her, and she hears it really, but only through a fog still too thick to decipher but there’s something there inching toward her understanding…Agh! I love it so much! So subtle, so magical, no “Let me tell you the symbolism of some native plant species, Darling…”
Okay. So here are some tips I picked up in grad school and from my agent and editor and trusted readers and amazing speakers at conferences and books on writing…these are some of my favorite gems:
1. Listen. Listen, listen when we’re out in the world, in line for coffee, at dinner with our in-laws. Listen and take surreptitious notes. We all do it even when we don’t want to these days, what with people on their cell phones shouting about their recent colonoscopy or their cousin’s messy divorce; instead of getting annoyed, take out your little notebook or your phone voice recorder, lean close to the person, and whisper, “Sorry, could you repeat the part about the laxative not fully cleaning you out and they had to vacuum parts of your anal cavity? Thanks, just right into the mic…” People are awesome. They will spout out some gems, and you’ve got to collect them all. Even if it’s nothing relevant to your current project, you’ll use it eventually. Trust me!
2. Read play scripts. Remember, plays are almost all dialogue. Not film scripts, watching and reading those are totally different experiences, there’s nothing but stage direction in a film script and very little dialogue, despite my film examples. The plays the thing. Heh. If you’ve never read a play and Shakespeare or Marlowe aren’t your jam (though you may love it and no one writes better dialogue than those guys) there are a million amazing contemporary playwrights (Mary Zimmerman or Sam Shepard, Tom Stoppard, Edward Albee, Wendy Wasserstein, Paula Vogel, John Patrick Shanley to name just the big ones) who all write dialogue that will set your brain on fire. Feel the rhythms, feel how the conversations make the story unwind and let tension grow, feel the quiet moments and the fighting, it’s a really unique experience. Full-length plays, when read straight through, can be consumed in like, an hour. Your local library has a ton. Or should unless they want a letter of complaint from Jenny.
3. The wonderful author Laini Taylor says, “Once you have a fully realized character with genuine motivation, plot happens naturally…and when your characters have actual things to talk about, dialogue comes naturally, easily.”
Laini’s not saying writing is easy, she’s saying when things are at stake, or one character is trying to get/give something from/to another character (even if it’s just information, the time of day, or something we don’t even know yet as in the E. Lockhart example) then yes, the dialogue can and will flow naturally. And when each character is fully realized and motivated, oh my gosh…each voice takes on a life of it’s own, and writing conversations becomes the super fun psychologically iffy game of Writer As Everyone. Which don’t deny it, we’ve all done in the shower when rehearing just how we’re going to argue with some jackass who has wronged us, or how we’ll ask someone to marry us or whatever. When we’re doing it well, and effectively, writing dialogue is fun.
So go forth, Writers! Be brave, let other people you trust read your stuff and listen to their comments, sift out the useful ones and don’t let your characters say dumb things. Writing is so hard. And also it is simple. And complicated. And easy. And impossible. And fun. And agonizing. It is Work, like anything else worth doing. And like words themselves, like the reader who will spend hours and hours with your story, the work deserves respect.
Hey. Remember that time you read a really long blog post instead of working on your book?
About The Author
Jennifer Longo’s debut novel Six Feet Over It will be in book stores, libraries, and your hands August 26th 2014 courtesy of Random House Books, Edited by Chelsea Eberly and represented by Melissa Sarver White at Folio Literary. A California native, Jennifer holds a Bachelor of Arts degree in Acting from San Francisco State University and a Master of Fine Arts degree in Writing For Theatre from Humboldt State University.
She is a two-time Irene Ryan Best Actor award recipient and a Kennedy Center American College Theatre Festival Best Full Length Script honoree for her play, Frozen. After years of acting, playwriting, working as a literary assistant at San Francisco’s Magic Theatre, then as an elementary school librarian, Jennifer told the occasional story at San Francisco’s Porch Light Storytelling Series and decided at last to face her fear of prose and actually write some. A recent San Francisco transplant, Jennifer lives with her husband and daughter on an island near Seattle, Washington and her every hour is consumed by writing, running marathons, walking her kid to ballet class eleven thousand times each week and reading every book she can get her hands on. Website
About The BookHome is where the bodies are buried.Darkly humorous and heart-wrenchingly beautiful, Jennifer Longo’s YA debut about a girl stuck living in a cemetery will change the way you look at life, death, and love.
Leigh sells graves for her family-owned cemetery because her father is too lazy to look farther than the dinner table when searching for employees. Working the literal graveyard shift, she meets two kinds of customers:Pre-Need:
They know what’s up. They bought their graves a long time ago, before they needed them.At Need:
They are in shock, mourning a loved one’s unexpected death. Leigh avoids sponging their agony by focusing on things like guessing the headstone choice (mostly granite).
Sarcastic and smart, Leigh should be able to stand up to her family and quit. But her world’s been turned upside down by the sudden loss of her best friend and the appearance of Dario, the slightly-too-old-for-her grave digger. Surrounded by death, can Leigh move on, if moving on means it’s time to get a life?Amazon
Love this quote.
One mistaken assumption that I've noticed some newbie writers making: Sending out their writing too soon, assuming that the editor who buys their short story (or novel, etc.) is going to be helping them polish the piece anyway.
DO NOT DO THIS.
Never, ever send an mss out just after you've finished it. Put it away for a few days (a few weeks at least, for a novel). That way you'll be able to reread more objectively, without the rosy glow of "omigosh this is brilliant just wait until publishers see this."
I'm a foodie, so often think in terms of food analogies. In this case, it would be sort of like a first-time restauranteur opening before they've perfected their dishes. Turn off the restaurant critics early on, and you make it tougher for yourself longterm.
If you're a new picture book writer, this is even MORE vital. Why? Because I've noticed that many non-pb writers assume that writing a picture book is easy because there are fewer words, that it's something they can do on the side for extra money while they work on their "real" books.
Vaguely related side note:
Others may differ, but I also advise NOT giving it to your critique group to read too soon. Why? Because there is a real value in getting feedback from someone who is reading the piece for the first time. Yes, there's a value in getting feedback for a rough version so you can polish it before sending it out to an editor. Be aware, however, that after the first critique, your crit partners will likely be giving feedback on your revisions rather than an overall first-time impression.
Respect your readers, before and after publication.
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What The Hale! By Elizabeth Langston and Lisa AmowitzElizabeth:
Last winter, my editor sent me a suggestion that has since changed my life. I had three books releasing in 2014 and no book covers. The publisher, Spencer Hill Press, had another author—Lisa Amowitz—who also designed books covers. Did I have time to work with her?
I couldn’t say “yes” quickly enough. I’d seen other covers that she’d designed and coveted them! Within days, Lisa and I were messaging feverishly, tossing out ideas, zeroing in on concepts, agreeing (and disagreeing) in a burst of creative energy that felt amazingly natural.Lisa:
First let me say that working for a small publisher, I often get the chance to work directly with authors. Elizabeth and I clicked immediately and what started as a professional relationship quickly evolved into a friendship. We found that despite being polar opposites in temperament and background, we somehow connected on a deeper level. Elizabeth:
Unexpected but true! Even though we’d ended our collaboration with the book covers, Lisa and I enjoyed our budding friendship so much that we just had to stay in touch.
Fast forward to March. After I’d spent a long weekend doing historical research in Williamsburg, Virginia, I came home and messaged to Lisa that I’d visited one of the film locations for the TV series TURN. Immediately, she started gushing about Revolutionary War spies and, in particular, Nathan Hale. Yeah, yeah, whatever. I love history, but I rarely obsess over guys who’ve been dead since the 1700s. (I reserve my obsessions for alive-but-inaccessible guys, like Michael Fassbender.)Lisa:
I also shared my (then secret but now totally out in the open) insane and immature crush for actor Benedict Cumberbatch, and after a conversation about the show TURN, I was amazed when Elizabeth did not laugh about my odd fascination for Nathan Hale. (Yes--between Cumberbatch and Hale, I’m used to plenty of eyerolls and blank stares from friends and family--though more with Nathan. Benedict seems to be quite popular these days.) When Elizabeth did not laugh in my face, I popped the question: “Do you want to co-write a YA story about Nathan Hale?”
I’d already read her writing and knew our styles would mesh beautifully. But the main thing is that I knew that Elizabeth had something important that I lacked—Elizabeth knew how to do historical research, something I’d tried, but had only gotten so far with before I’d given up in despair.
Given the complete lack of enthusiasm for my Nathan Hale fixation from everyone but my mother, I was stunned by her answer.
Yes, she, said--when do we start?Elizabeth:
I was really excited about the idea. Although I’d never vacationed before with a friend, here I was, agreeing to fly up to New York for five days to hang out with Lisa and see if this passionate interest in colonial history and Nathan Hale could result in a book. Even more, we had to discover if we had the personalities, skills, and time to make this project happen.
We held our writing retreat in July—and here are three of the lessons we learned.Process.
Your writing processes can be different—but you have to respect that and find a way to make them compatible. Lisa likes to write in chronological order. I like to jump around. At our retreat, we created a detailed synopsis of the whole book. Lisa uses it to write in order. I can still jump around.Contribution.
You both have to feel like you can contribute some unique and important to the project. For me, it’s my understanding of the colonial American world. For Lisa, it’s her deep knowledge of Nathan Hale and New York.Voice.
Your voices have to complement each other. I have a lighter voice with an old-fashioned feel. I’ll be writing mostly in the POV of our colonial heroine, a girl who begins our story at age 16. Lisa has the darker, edgier voice. She’ll channel Nathan Hale—a guy who always suspected that his life would be short—although maybe not even he would’ve guessed it would end at age 21.Lisa:
I’ll wrap this up by saying that the thing I feared most about our visit would be that I would prove to be “too much” for Elizabeth. At Spencer Hill Press, my nickname is The Squirrel on Crack, given my extroverted New Yorkie personality, my tendency to talk very fast and a LOT, and my frenetic multi-tasking. I was nervous. I thought Elizabeth would have the need to hide from me for many hours out of the day.
What I found instead, was that while she’s a more laid back and soft spoken Southern lady, her energy level is just as intense and hard-driving as mine. We worked relentlessly for ten to twelve hours a day, like two bloodhounds tracking down a trail. We had to make a special time each day for “playtime” in which we ended up plotting each other’s OTHER books (and drinking some very sweet wine).
In short, like in a good relationship, opposites attract. We have found that our opposite temperaments and capabilities are actually our strengths, and that the one area in which we are similar--DRIVE, PASSION and COMMITMENT (and love of a good yarn) was just the impetus we’ll rely upon to bring this project to its completion.
Here I am with the plot map we produced on one of our more intense worksessions.
What the Hale!
Elizabeth: Last winter, my editor sent me a suggestion that has since changed my life. I had three books releasing in 2014 and no book covers. The publisher, Spencer Hill Press, had another author—Lisa Amowitz—who also designed books covers. Did I have time to work with her?
I couldn’t say “yes” quickly enough. I’d seen other covers that she’d designed and coveted them! Within days, Lisa and I were messaging feverishly, tossing out ideas, zeroing in on concepts, agreeing (and disagreeing) in a burst of creative energy that felt amazingly natural.
Lisa: First let me say that working for a small publisher, I often get the chance to work directly with authors. Elizabeth and I clicked immediately and what started as a professional relationship quickly evolved into a friendship. We found that despite being polar opposites in temperament and background, we somehow connected on a deeper level.
Elizabeth: Unexpected but true! Even though we’d ended our collaboration with the book covers, Lisa and I enjoyed our budding friendship so much that we just had to stay in touch.
Fast forward to March. After I’d spent a long weekend doing historical research in Williamsburg, Virginia, I came home and messaged to Lisa that I’d visited one of the film locations for the TV series TURN. Immediately, she started gushing about Revolutionary War spies and, in particular, Nathan Hale. Yeah, yeah, whatever. I love history, but I rarely obsess over guys who’ve been dead since the 1700s. (I reserve my obsessions for alive-but-inaccessible guys, like Michael Fassbender.)
Lisa: I also shared my (then secret but now totally out in the open) insane and immature crush for actor Benedict Cumberbatch, and after a conversation about the show TURN, I was amazed when Elizabeth did not laugh about my odd fascination for Nathan Hale. (Yes--between Cumberbatch and Hale, I’m used to plenty of eyerolls and blank stares from friends and family--though more with Nathan. Benedict seems to be quite popular these days.) When Elizabeth did not laugh in my face, I popped the question: “Do you want to co-write a YA story about Nathan Hale?”
I’d already read her writing and knew our styles would mesh beautifully. But the main thing is that I knew that Elizabeth had something important that I lacked—Elizabeth knew how to do historical research, something I’d tried, but had only gotten so far with before I’d given up in despair.
Given the complete lack of enthusiasm for my Nathan Hale fixation from everyone but my mother, I was stunned by her answer.
Yes, she, said--when do we start?
Elizabeth: I was really excited about the idea. Although I’d never vacationed before with a friend, here I was, agreeing to fly up to New York for five days to hang out with Lisa and see if this passionate interest in colonial history and Nathan Hale could result in a book. Even more, we had to discover if we had the personalities, skills, and time to make this project happen.
We held our writing retreat in July—and here are three of the lessons we learned.
Process. Your writing processes can be different—but you have to respect that and find a way to make them compatible. Lisa likes to write in chronological order. I like to jump around. At our retreat, we created a detailed synopsis of the whole book. Lisa uses it to write in order. I can still jump around.
Contribution. You both have to feel like you can contribute some unique and important to the project. For me, it’s my understanding of the colonial American world. For Lisa, it’s her deep knowledge of Nathan Hale and New York.
Voice. Your voices have to complement each other. I have a lighter voice with an old-fashioned feel. I’ll be writing mostly in the POV of our colonial heroine, a girl who begins our story at age 16. Lisa has the darker, edgier voice. She’ll channel Nathan Hale—a guy who always suspected that his life would be short—although maybe not even he would’ve guessed it would end at age 21.
Lisa: I’ll wrap this up by saying that the thing I feared most about our visit would be that I would prove to be “too much” for Elizabeth. At Spencer Hill Press, my nickname is The Squirrel on Crack, given my extroverted New Yorkie personality, my tendency to talk very fast and a LOT, and my frenetic multi-tasking. I was nervous. I thought Elizabeth would have the need to hide from me for many hours out of the day.
What I found instead, was that while she’s a more laid back and soft spoken Southern lady, her energy level is just as intense and hard-driving as mine. We worked relentlessly for ten to twelve hours a day, like two bloodhounds tracking down a trail. We had to make a special time each day for “playtime” in which we ended up plotting each other’s OTHER books (and drinking some very sweet wine).
In short, like in a good relationship, opposites attract. We have found that our opposite temperaments and capabilities are actually our strengths, and that the one area in which we are similar--DRIVE, PASSION and COMMITMENT (and love of a good yarn) was just the impetus we’ll rely upon to bring this project to its completion.
Here I am with the plot map we produced on one of our more intense worksessions.
About The Authors
Elizabeth Langston lives in North Carolina, halfway between the beaches and the mountains. She has two daughters in college and one husband at home. When she's not writing software or stories, Elizabeth loves to travel with her family, watch shows on dance or Sherlock, and dream about which restaurant ought to get her business that night.
WHISPERS FROM THE PAST, the 3rd book in Elizabeth's WHISPER FALLS YA time travel series, releases in October. I WISH, the 1st book in her new YA magical realism series, releases in November. Learn more about Elizabeth at http://www.elizabethLangston.net .blog
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Lacey Linden is hiding the truth of her life—a depressed mom, a crumbling house, and bills too big to pay. While her high school classmates see a girl with a ready smile and good grades, Lacey spends her evenings seeking ways to save her family. On a get-cash-quick trip to the flea market, Lacey stumbles over a music box that seemingly begs her to take it home. She does, only to find it is inhabited by a gorgeous "genie." He offers her a month of wishes, one per day, but there's a catch. Each wish must be humanly possible.
Grant belongs to a league of supernatural beings, dedicated to serving humans in need. After two years of fulfilling the boring wishes of conventional teens, he is one assignment away from promotion to a challenging new role with more daring cases. Yet his month with Lacey is everything that he expects and nothing like he imagines. Lacey and Grant soon discover that the most difficult task of all might be saying goodbye.Amazon
LISA AMOWITZ was born in Queens and raised in the wilds of Long Island, New York where she climbed trees, thought small creatures lived under rocks and studied ant hills. And drew. A lot. She is a professor of Graphic Design at her beloved Bronx Community College where she has been tormenting and cajoling students for nearly seventeen years. She started writing eight years ago because she wanted something to illustrate, but somehow, instead ended up writing YA–probably because her mind is too dark and twisted for small children.
Her first book, Breaking Glass, was released by Spencer Hill Press in 2013, and she has three more novels scheduled for release: Vision, the first of the Finder series in May 2014, its unnamed sequel in 2015, and Until Beth in Spring of 2015.blog
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The light is darker than you think…
High school student Bobby Pendell already has his hands full—he works almost every night to support his disabled-vet father and gifted little brother. Then he meets the beautiful new girl in town, who just happens to be his boss’s daughter. Bobby has rules about that kind of thing. Nothing matters more than keeping his job.
When Bobby starts to get blinding migraines that come with scary, violent hallucinations, his livelihood is on the line. Soon, he must face the stunning possibility that the visions of murder are actually real. With his world going dark, Bobby is set on the trail of the serial killer terrorizing his small town. With everyone else convinced he’s the prime suspect, Bobby realizes that he, or the girl he loves, might be killer's next victim.Amazon