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Here’s the challenge: Can you write a detailed 200 or more word paragraph WITHOUT using the (being) words IS-ARE-WAS-WERE or AM? I was challenged by my 9 year old son (who was challenged by his teacher). Here’s my paragraph. It was so much fun I actually decided to continue and am now wrapping up the book: (Paragraph below is unrevised. It is the exact paragraph I presented to my son. So no pointing those editing fingers at me!)
Gloria, dressed in a knee length yellow dress with a peculiar studded man’s vest over top, rode down our street on her badly chipped wobbly green scooter. When she caught up to me she breathlessly exclaimed that she hoped to get a brand new scooter for her birthday. She felt her chances were ”tremendously probable” because she overheard her mom telling her dad that Marty’s World had a purple scooter just her size for sale. I thought her geeky lime green scooter looked bad enough, but purple?! I secretly hoped she wouldn’t ask me to come to her birthday party this year. At the risk of sounding horribly cruel, I hated going to her dreadfully lame parties. Last year, instead of pin the tail on the donkey or musical chairs we planted our own potted ferns or pine trees to take home. (My mother loved the idea) Instead of cookies or ice cream, we had to eat stiff fiber muffins and applesauce. Blech! It’s not our fault that she suffers from allergies! I noticed that she had something white and square in her hand. An invitation?! I pretended that my mom had just texted me to come home. With a quick wave, I rode back to my house as fast as I could on a much too small big wheel borrowed from my brother. I couldn’t help but think that although Gloria suffers from being incredibly geeky, lame, and fashion challenged, at least she owned her own scooter.
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