MARK TWAIN, my spiritual mentor since beginning my long journey as an author and the guy I stole more from than anyone else I have stolen from, he has a great many great quotes but this one I purely love: "KEEP AWAY from people who try to belittle your ambitions. SMALL PEOPLE always do that, but the really great make you feel that you too, can be great."
I have had my collegaues in the teaching profession say to me, "Rob, you actually think anyone can do what you do, don't you?"
"Of course and why not? When it comes to writing fiction, guess what? Doing of it is the teacher, and I pretty much taught myself, set up my own curriculum and went at it. So why not another? Why not my students?"
Of course not all students succeed, and not all great young writers prevail. It is a myth to believe that well crafted writing alone will lift an author to the top of his profession. Most never get past all the frustration and need for patience, the time it takes to evolve into a talented writer who can actually make shapely fiction. For it takes years, and for most of us, a lifetime as truly, there are few things in life that require as much self-teaching and practice and skill-building as crafting solid fiction.
Dearn R. Koontz once advised me to slow down, adding, "Robert, you don't do your best work until you turn 50 anyway." He was right of course but at the time I was teetering on 50, and very frustrated and feeling I had put in way too much time on a dying propostion to begin with...contemplating quitting altogether. Who needed the headaches and the heartaches and the belly aches from hunger and depression at not achieving the gold ring?
What Koontz meant and what I know now is that it has taken me 30 years of continuous writing to get to the level of proficiency I am at currently. Sure there are those amazing wonders among us out who careen to the top of the bestseller list with their first publicaiton but scratch the surface and 99 percent of the time, you will learn that first publicaiton came only after six, seven or even ten previously written UNpublished novels.
I feel indeed I am doing my BEST work in a checkered career now, that my more recent titles -- all of which have been written within the last few years as Kindle Originals are my best to date works, books I could not have written when I was young and full of eager impatience to be published.
With each book I have written, I have gotten better over these many years, and to get so good as to be speed writing with confidence, most of us have to go through the harrowing period I call the Valley of Death thorugh whch Job himself must suffer...that it takes the patience of the biblical Job to prosper in any of the major arts - be it film, sculpting, painting, computer graphics, poetry, biography, fiction. Whatever your addiction craves to create.
Frightfully now, up on Kindle bookshelves, my readers can go wayyyy back in time, look over my early works, and see how terribly weak they are compared to my latest works. What a difference; it is like when Martin Cruse Smith went from doing a schlocky vampire vs. Native American horror novel to writing such as Gorky Park, not that any of my books are Gorky Park. But I began writing thin books, thin in size and in depth, lacking setting and character but with a lot of plot. Only over time and with experience(s), did my novels fatten up completely to the point they turn some folks off due to sheer page numbers.
My newer work, however, are character-driven, filled with fully realized characters rather than the thin shadows of my early, past c
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WHAT MIGHT BE SWAMPING YOUR SENTENCES
by Robert W. Walker
I see a lot of writing any given day as I teach English at the college level along with writing courses and literature courses, and sometimes I get feeling no pain and let this pass and that pass as there is only so much I can do about the dumbing down of American schools and curriculum....a situation that has been going on for decades now. When a student tells me she has in four years of high school not had to write one single research paper, it makes my jaw drop. "What did you do for four years?" Her reply -- Watched films.
The problem that manifests itself in the writing of such a one as this sweet kid is writing with a proliferation of non-words, leech words, words that suck the meaing out of all she wants so desperately to say and get out of her mind. Bloated sentences that are run ons, others that are fragments, but the worst crime to clarity is a preponderance of pronouns put into play. For example: Mary told her mother that she was fat and ugly.... No way to know who in that sentence is SHE...which she is fat, I mean. Another example of a waterlogged sentence, waterlogged with pronouns. We have three little girls in a short story and the student -- another studnent this time -- writes the following: The little girl was upset because the other little girl told the other little girl that she did not belong at the party as a guest but that the first little girl, whose mother was a servant at the party, was there to serve food and not to party with the other little girl.
Makes you want to say Jesus, Joseph, and Mary, I know....I know. Talk about a sentence that was dead in the water before it began. And it could all have been cleared up and made alive by a simple use of NAMES....Name each lil' girl. Rosari, Madeliene, Tasha -- thank you. Naming names, even repeating names thoughout your story keeps a reader focused; names have power and magic and are far, far more like a Kodak moment in the brain than she or he or we or they or it. Name it, name him, name her, and name the town, the river, the lake, the park, the cemetery. Names have resonance and meaning. We can connect with names of people, places, and things but not so much with IT or THEM, especially when there are more than one set of its or thems in the story or sentence for that matter. You can't go wrong with coming back to naming names, using nouns. The two most powerful words in any given sentence are the subject noun and the verb...followed by the object noun. If you replace the subject noun and the object noun think about what happens to the following: Mark looked sharply at Christopher where he stood leaning against the fencepost. NOW let's replace the names with pronouns and we get less definition and clarity and focus (more confusion): He looked sharply at him where he stood leaning against it.
Dead in the water. Pronouns cause all sorts of questions to be raised in the mind of the beholder. The power of a full name like Jack Buckland or Kelly Irvin or Milicent Carver is where it is at, especially in fiction and it sure helps in nonfiction and research papers as well. These are the things that try an English professor's soul and cause doctors of philosophy to pull out their hair. That and the missteps and missues of words like stuff, thing, alot a lot, get ( I dislike get); not to mention the failure to distinctly speak and understand such pronouns at THEIR as opposed to THEY'RE and THERE or Its and it's. Even hole and whole! Even roll and role! Worst yet the u
Love your post. Twain is my mentor also.I would have loved to swap lies with him until the wee hours in some news room.
Jay Hudson
thanks, Jay...me too. He was a great journalist. I discovered James Herriot, author of All Creatures Great & Small, the Scottish veternarian pre WWII in England countryside practice to be as close an author to Twain as I have seen, far more so than say Garrison Keillor, Herriot, like Twain, can make you laugh and cry at the same time in the same paragraph.
again thanks for dropping in
rob
I've always been a fan of James Herriot too and his work translates well to the small screen. Have to say I prefer my mentors alive, as in this day and age almost everyone is accessible. When I was a sapling I learned Bluegrass guitar from an intruction album on vinyl by Stefan Grossman. Recently I was looking to find out if the song 'Death Comes Creeping' was public domain as the lyrics fitted with my serial killer WIP and imagine my surprise when I found Stefan alive, well and selling on the internet. Not only that but he responded personally to my email within 24 hours. Oh wonders of elektrickery! All borders have come down.
Rob, your back catalogue is your treasure trove in this age of Kindle.
Thanks for another great post Rob! And especially for passing on what Dean Koontz said about doing your best work after 50. Given that I'll hit that mark in another couple of months, and like you I've been writing since 4th grade or so, it's nice to know that my best work is still ahead of me.
Also heartily agree with you about James Herriot. I discovered him as an animal crazy adolescent and have always thought his writing was some of the most elegant and evocative I'd ever had the pleasure of immersing myself in.
Don't you always wonder what a younger author has to say in a memoir? My childhood was ...? I read somewhere that after doing something 10,000 times a person's sill level at the activity really starts to bloom. There are no shortcuts.
I found it interesting recently to read Harlan Coben's first, previously unpublished (I believe) novel, and try and note what has changed between it and his later works. I admire not only your patience but your perspective, Rob. Thanks for the post.
Ruby -- dud you try to talk Stefan into allowing use of his song for your serial killer book? eh? eh? I wanted to use an ee cummings poem once but when Berkley/Jove went after rights, they found it so expensive that I had to write my own damn poetry for the book....I so wanted JAKE HATES ALL the GIRLS....would have been perfect.
Next time I needed poetry for a serial killer, I used my son's ooems, getting him published in the pages of Bitter Instinct. After that, a grateful son began calling me McDaddy.
rob - have my backlist all selling on Kindle now.
Warrenm Jan, Jenny - thanks so much for your input; everyone's point of view is appreciated here. You may want to locate my thread on Kindle Community forums if you have a kindle title up, as the thread is "What Moves Kindle Bks. off the Shelf." The input there is great for practical tips to move those books into reader hands.
Rob
Hey Rob. That's real cute to get your son's poems published in that way, nice one. Stefan told me that, like most of the Blues and Ragtime pieces he plays, Death Comes Creeping is trad and handed down by mouth from the great Bluegrass guitarists of yore, so it was public domain.
These sort of things can get very expensive I know. Our tutor asked Leonard Cohen, as a friend, to come and give us a talk at our writers' course but he wanted 10k USD for the pleasure. I had an idea to use Bird on a Wire for my Ger Mayes book but I didn't bother after that experience.
It's always a good idea if, like my old Bluegrass band, the inspiration can be got from those long gone. Cheaper that way and it adds an air of mystique. Case in point - Mark Twain.
Writing is a learning process. No matter how much you know, there's always more you can learn!
My novels are also character driven, since I love getting into people's heads and being them for a while.
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What you say is so true, Rob. Some of my earlier plots were WAY too complicated even though they were character-driven. Nowadays I try not to give myself a headache with endless twists and turns in the story.