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1. Verb Tension

I've written about this before, but it requires reinforcement.

I hate it when a writer doesn't know the difference between writing in present and past tense (I like both if done correctly). Lately I've picked up several books that have both tenses in the same paragraph, sometimes the same sentence. Those books quickly end up on my discard pile even if I genuinely enjoyed the premise. I can forgive one or two lapses, but not an entire book.

Verb tense cues the reader in to when an action took place. Verb tenses should change only when there is a change in time.

In terms of story structure, there are only two specific tenses to worry about: present and past.

It most commercial fiction, the stories are written in what is considered past tense. That doesn’t mean a sentence cannot use a different tense if required. Rather, the story is related as if it had already happened and the reader is only now learning about it from the point of view character.

Stories written in present tense are less common and relate the story as if it is happening right at that very moment to the point of view character. Writing an entire novel in present tense is tricky.

The rest of the complex verb forms are marked by words called auxiliaries. Grasping the six basic tenses allows a writer to control the timeframe of the scenes through the sentence structure.

Problems in sequencing tenses tend to occur with the perfect tenses, all of which are formed by adding words to the past participles: had, have, will, and will have. The most common add-ons are: be, can, do,  has, have, had, may, must, ought, shall, will, and would.

Verb tense alerts you to narrator intrusions.
          Sally didn’t understand yet that her life would never be the same.

Aside from poor foreshadowing, if you’ve been using past tense, you just launched the reader into a future timeframe.

Let’s review verb tenses in detail.

·Present tense: When using present tense, the verb choice reflects an unchanging, repeated, or reoccurring action or situation that exists in the present. Few stories are written in present tense.
          I stroke his hair.
        His hand slides down my arm, his thumb searching for a pulse.

· Present progressive tense describes an ongoing action that is happening at the same time the statement is written. This tense is formed by using am, is, are with the verb form ending in ing.
          I am stroking his hair.
        We are walking the dog.
        The sun is shining.

· Present perfect tense refers to something that happened at an indefinite time in the past or that began in the past and continues into the present. It uses have or had in combination with the past participle of the verb, usually ending in ed. Irregular verbs have special past participles.
          We have searched high and low and cannot find it.
        We have been using this process for five years.

· Present perfect progressive tense describes an action that began in the past, continues in the present, and may continue into the future. This tense is formed by using has and have been and the present participle of the verb ending in ing.
          We have been considering the possibility of retiring to Florida.

· Past Tense
When using past tense, the verb choice expresses an action or situation that started and finished in the past and usually ends in ed. Irregular verbs have special past tense forms. Most commercial fiction is written in past tense.
          Sally reached for the knife.
            Dick raced down the stairs.
        I led the charge into the building.

· Past progressive tense is used to describe a past action which was happening when another action occurred and uses was and were with a verb ending in ing.
          I was reaching for his knife.
        Dick was racing down the stairs when the alarm sounded.

This tense is considered passive and writers are encouraged to do a search and kill for sentences using was plus ing. Try searching for the word wasin your draft. It will take hours, but do it. Get rid of as many as you can.

· Past perfect tense is used for an action that took place in the past before another past action. This tense is formed by using had with the past participle of the verb.
          By the time we arrived, the fight had ended.

· Past perfect progressive tense references a past but ongoing action that was completed before some other past action. This tense is formed by using had been and the present perfect form of the verb ending in ing.
          Before the alarm rang, the firemen had been cooking dinner and playing poker.


· Future Tense
Future tense expresses a situation that has not yet occurred. It uses will or shall.
          Dick will go the store on Monday.
        Jane shall meet the deadline.

· Progressive future tense describes an ongoing or continuous action that will take place in the future. This tense is formed by using will be or shall be with a verb ending in ing.
          Jane will be singing with the choir on July fourth.

· Future perfect tense refers to an action that will occur in the future before some other action. This tense is formed by using will have with the past participle of the verb.
          By the time we arrive in London, the tour bus will have been waiting there for several days.

· Future perfect progressive tense refers to a future, ongoing action that will occur before some specified future time, using will have been and the present participle of verbs ending in ing.
          By this time next year, we will have been publishing and selling more books than we ever imagined.

Shifting viewpoint does not mean shifting tense. If you are attributing thoughts to a character, you do not shift into the present tense to express them unless you are writing the piece in present tense.
          Incorrect: “I really hate them,” she thinks.
          Correct: “I really hate them,” she thought.


Shifting tense and misuse of tense are plot holes. They are hard to ignore and interrupt the flow. It forces the reader to re-read a sentence or paragraph. Subtle, unintended time shifts create confusion. A reader might have to stop and ask, “Did he or will he?”

Perfecting verb tense is a rudinmentary skill every writer needs in their writing toolkit.

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2. Heavy Velocity Nano-science ship 1

Once during a time before this time there was an advanced group of people living on what is now called earth. They were advanced enough to be in the beginnings of off world flight and living for extended ages in the quite of space. These people had several colonies on outer planets and were mining comets for iron to build fantastic ships that would support large colonies for ages in flight to other galaxies.

By the time they had 3 expeditions launched the earth was pretty depleted of those who were capable of living off planet even with their work in the nano-health  sciences making the remaining population live longer and healthier, the greatest of their minds had opted for the grand travel in search of new worlds and higher learning.

As the last, as it turned out, star ship was leaving the galactic boundaries it learned of  a catastrophe about to send solar debris toward earth in a massive wave that was more than the inhabitants could overcome and an almost complete annihilation of life on earth would happen but because they would be drawn in and also destroyed if they tried to reverse course to help, they stayed their course and the ships leader General Odessa Davis sent word to the other outbound vessels of the destruction and that he and his crew would go into dormancy except for the AI and robots who could carry out advanced scientific studies that could be fed into the human bodies as they rested in stasis and would come out after a period of time when it was again safe to venture back to help what ever was left of society in the solar system.

After many eons Davis was awakened, fully rejuvenated by the internal bot-medics, his DNA advanced and most known human physical problems dealt with. His crew as well had been resurrected to a much advanced state of physical ability. The AI was far advanced but still willing to be part of “The new humanity”.

On returning to Earth they found all the outposts along the way had suffered total annihilation and only Earth was left with life but not human in nature. Only larger land animals and ocean creatures lived well but were in an altered state from the creatures who the space dwellers had left behind before the destruction  of the planets they knew as home.

The land masses had turned under in the violence and no sign of the former intelligence was in evidence beyond things that were rusting beyond recognition or were soon to be abducted under the volcanic eruptions still roiling upon the surface.

General Odessa Davis’ crew was small compared to the other colony ships human cargo but it had wide diversity in genetic standing. It was agreed that a new human society was to be created on this “New” Earth and their ship would explore the outer reaches of this galaxy while it naturally built itself with no artificial intelligence help.

Science Administrator Thomas Alvin Nester was assigned to find suitable earth hosts for DNA from the ships ancient cold storage to start the new humans on the planet. A few examples where gathered from warm blooded species that could simulate human form though not so close as to copy human form as it was in the past and the most dangerous animals that would be a hazard to these prototype “New lifers” would be eliminated using low tech asteroid bombardment which would also rearrange the world to have more water segregated continents for the experiment to give more chances one would work in favor of a new society that would eventually be allowed to carry on the work of the ancients in outer space while giving diversity to the human body form.

S.A.Thomas A.  Nester or as his suit tag read S.A.T.A.N. was told to give the subjects only pure original DNA because G. O. Davis wanted Independent natural growth before any advanced knowledge was invested in this new human experiment. But Nester thought he knew more about science and what should be the new form of things than the General and allowed advanced knowledge to be a

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3. Think Back Tuesday (Ah The 80s!)


Marketing Smarketing: Just Do it (Thanks Nike!)

No Marketing Tip today.
Tip? - Just do it. :)
To be honest, I'm just tired of talking about it today. I am on 3 jobs right now that are about 90 hrs of work with 12 hrs of child care (and that does not include my writing) :) Ill start my 30 days of marketing back up tomorrow.

Think Back Tuesday

With the whole Facebook thing, I've been forced to see photos of my old self and reconnect with people from the past - some I cared about, some I did not really know, and....others.

It has also brought back some memories that I have not thought about in years about my life in the 80s.

My Style
  • Hershey Kiss Lip Gloss and Lip Smackers - I loved these! Especially the ones that came out at Christmas in the Candy Cane tube.
  • Mood lipstick was huge! After you applied the green lipstick - it turned pink! Go figure.
  • Mousse and Perms - Unfortunately I bought into this even though my hair was (and still is) naturally curly. If I had my yesteryear hair today. I'm pretty sure I'd be stopped by Homeland Security for harboring a possible weapon.
  • "Rooster Bangs", Mullets, and Side ponytails - yeah baby!
  • Head bands! How else do you hold back the big hair?
  • Apollonia's eye makeup from the movie Prince - I called in Rainbow eyes.
  • Fake moles - yes I did this. When I stopped doing it, I think I just told people I had it removed :)

My Fashion

  • Leg Warmers - Thanks Jennifer Beal! Ah, s many colors, so little time. Weird how no one had cold legs until the 80s.
  • White Keds - These looked even better with multi-layered colored socks. I'd change these up with some Vans or Chucks.
  • Stirrup pants - just in case I wanted to ride a horse after school - I was prepared.
  • O-Rings (Jelly Bracelets) - the pretty colored neon plastic bracelets . I say, the more the better.
  • Parachute pants - I needed all those pockets, don't care what anyone says. I had a red pair and a black pair! I was Double-Kool.
  • Swatch Watch - Not just one... but three or four. Imagine one arms filled with Jelly bracelets and the other covered in Swatch Watches (so why was I always late for school)
  • High Waisted Trousers - I htink they made my legs look long - which I needed.
  • Shoulder pads - b/c the look of a football player was what I wanted.
  • Black Lace fingerless gloves - I was a Material Girl in a Material world. What better material than lace.
  • Jelly shoes - b/c they were so comfortable - NOT!
  • Acid wash jeans - I would feel safe saying that these shoudl not make a come back. Oh, I just had a frighteningly vivid Punky-Brewster flashback.
  • “Pegged” cuffs - Don't laugh. I was actually voted: "Most likely to Peg" in school (fold and tuck)

My Fun

  • Atari Pac Man and Super Mario Brothers - Rock on! I flipped Pac Man like a zillion times.
  • Breakdancing - uh, not that I would know.
  • Rubix Cube - I used to impress my family with my RC skills. Little did they know that I simply removed the stickers and replaced them with all the colors together. Ha!
  • Cabbage Patch dolls - my parents would not get me a REAL one so my mom had one made?? I was the laughing stock at school. *sniff*. I still get sad feelings when I walk down the cabbage patch aisle ay Target. There are some wounds that will never heal.
  • Friendship Pins - The more the better. I accepted them from anyone, even if it was from someone who hated me.
  • Duran Duran, Bon Jovi, Madonna, A-Ha, Pet Shop Boys - need I say more?
  • Roller skating at Sparkles - I had my own skates - white with green sparkly laces. Oh yeah, I actually broke my wrist skating showing off for my mom. Just can't be cool.
  • Ouiji Boards - man this was fun at slumber parties :)
  • Slip and Slides - lesson? only do it in a one-piece bathing suit.
  • Aerobics/Jazzercise - remember Jamie Lee Curtis in "Perfect" with JOhn Travola!
  • Dungeons and Dragons - even then I was always on the comupter - it was just a mainframe that's all.

My Slang

  • "do the wild thing"
  • "Fer sure dude!"
  • "Gag me"
  • Geez, don't have a cow?
  • Let's "party harty"
  • "Eat my shorts"
  • "Totally awesome" (crap i think I still say this *sigh*)

Events I remember

  • Challenger explosion
  • blizzard in Georgia
  • Just say no!
  • Bomb disaster drills
  • Getting suspended for having one beer while I cheered at a football game (3 others were with me so at least I didn't drink alone - right?)
  • Craig Bolier breaking my heart
  • Wrecking my parents Jaquar - twice.
  • Meeting at the DQ!
  • My first car.
If you don't remember if you grew up in the 80s, heer are some reminders:
  • You know what "Willis was talkin' 'bout?"
  • You think Atari was a state of the art computer.
  • You still wonder why Smurfette was the ONLY female Smurf.
  • You know the deep meaning of "Wax on, Wax off."
  • You know who Mr. T is.
  • You still have old cassettes.
  • You still feel wary about the water because of that damn movie - Jaws.
  • You practice moves from the Thriller video.
  • You thought we'd be living on the moon in the year 2000.
  • You had a light saber because the force was with you.
  • You wore biker shorts under skirts.
  • You still call motorcycle cops - Ponch
  • You still use your Snoopy Sno-cone Machine.
  • You consider the "Jo vs. Blair" conflict a major one of our century.
  • You saw the New Kids on the Block in concert when they opened for Tiffany.
  • You get in and out of your car through the windows.
  • Sometimes you just want to "shout, shout, let it all out."
  • You use your Speak and Spell to phone home.
  • You know the original members of Menudo.
  • You still feel St. Elmo's fire burning' in you.
  • If someone says, "Who are you gonna call?"- you yell "Ghostbusters."
  • YOu wished your number was 8675309
So please if you are old enough to have memories of the 80s - drop me a comment and tell me what you remember. Let me know I am not the oldest one here?

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4. Window to the future …


No matter how hard through the window to the future I look, alas tis always the past I see looking back at me in the glass and by the time the future comes around there is no way to change the things I should have done. Only a static rush of things gone by, a passing sound.
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